|Reviews for Maternal Instincts|
| Nalance chapter 1 . 7/29/2011
based on the statement u made that sousuke never told her "i love you" and that the amalgam kidnnapping was 3 months long im going to guess you havent finished the story well im afriad both of those are incorrect the kidnapping lasted a little over a year and after 3 or 4 months on a radio chat after his first failed attempt to recuse her, they both admitted they loved each other. sorry for the spoilers tho since this was written a long time ago years ago infact i would assume uve read the entire story by now
| Stone Amber chapter 1 . 4/13/2010
I know it's like, wow, 5 years later, but kudos on a job well done.
| Maiden of the Moon chapter 1 . 8/26/2007
One of the best FMP fics I have ever read. Extraordinarily cute and well written; this gave me warm fuzzies and a great big smile. X3
| Ranma15177 chapter 1 . 10/28/2006
Very seldom do people get the relationship between Sousuke and Kaname right. I'm always happy to read stories like this. The two are so in character and it's funny that I can see this as an eventual turn of events. In "Continuing on My Own" there is a part where Kaname is wondering at how they became friends. One day they had just started walking side by side...It's really the paramount of their relationship. Eventual small steps leading to an end.
I don't like kids either. I have two now. I've just decided to hate other people's kids. It works for me. :)
| Mitsuki chapter 1 . 2/5/2006
I just wanted to say that I will love you forever, you write such beautiful fics, about one of the best pairings ever out there. So awesome! Aw it's just so adorable, consider me an addict to your fics XD
Thank you for sharing such squeeable, cute and wonderful stories.
ChidorixKaname is always always so much love
| Neko-chan4 chapter 1 . 1/19/2006
Verry cute! No, not sickly, WAFF cute, or "this is my first fanfic-R&R! hugs! don't hate me!" cute. Well written, thought-provoking, put-a-wry-smile-on-my-face cute. And so very in character, as well! Major kudos to you! I just love thought-provoking pieces like this. I think that your take on their relationship is dead-on-you described it so well when Kaname was reflecting on how they had never actually 'SAID' they loved each other.
"Besides, in their situation, melodramatic declarations of love were almost superfluous."
So true. That is Kaname and Sousuke to a T!
| Neptune47 chapter 1 . 8/22/2005
Will you marry me?
Seriously. You're freakin' awesome, and my new FMP hero. I took about year off from this fandom, but decided to check back in after watching episode 6 of TSR. And as luck would have it, your fic "A Simple Stone" was at the top of the list. After reading that, this and a few of your other fics, I declare you to be a genius who really knows the characters of Kaname and Sousuke, plus the way they interact with each other like the back of her hand.
I always find it hard to swallow these future fics because one or both of the characters seem OOC. But you've managed to make them natural extensions of their present selves, which makes me so freakin' happy. It's so rare to find that in an author! The way Chidori welcomed Sousuke home was perfect. So was his reaction to her bringing up the subject of children. I also think that the fact that they don't verbally express their love for each other is very much how an actual relationship between them would work. Sousuke isn't about social norms like saying "I love you." He's a man who lives through his actions, and his actions more that adaquetly proove his feelings.
Okay, before I stop rambling, I have to ask: do you follow the FMP novels, or are you just psychic? I'm japanese illiterate, so have been following an online translation groups releases of the Novel set. They've released 2 parts of "Continuing On My Own" and I'm desperate to know how that book ends. If you HAVE read that book, and would be willing to share with a spoiler-ho like me the Sousuke/Kaname goodness, it would be much appreciated.
However,if you haven't been following the novels, and are just a pyschic, then I'm in even more awe of you.
| Drgn050 chapter 1 . 8/12/2005
I love 2 review good stories,but u can keep the kid,I loathe them as much as u do,but,like u I use them in stories 2!
| J O A N N I C A chapter 1 . 7/26/2005
omg! that was good !
| Faye-Faye14 chapter 1 . 7/24/2005
Wow. I am so amazed by this fic! Awesome job! I've never read a fic with Sousuke and Kaname so in character. It was excellent! Yay XD Thanks so much.
| suriru chapter 1 . 6/30/2005
| Nix Wolfwood chapter 1 . 6/20/2005
I really enjoy your FMP stories...write a billion more...and this one was amusing...and...YAY!
| Quietcoloredmusic chapter 1 . 6/20/2005
That was interesting. Kind funny. If you think about it Sousuke is really always funny in his own way
| Mimi-san chapter 1 . 6/8/2005
Perfection my dear Anysai! I was cracking up so bad! _ Another masterpiece my dear Don't forget to update Beaty and the Otaku kay? You still have this loyal reader waiting ever so patiently! _b Take care and update soon!
| Lakewood chapter 1 . 6/7/2005
Your firstborn? Thanks, I'll put it on the wall with the rest of my collection. I prefer Fedex as a means of...
... 'That' was a failed attempt at humor. I think I'll move on to the review now.
I'll start off by saying that your keen characterization of Kaname never fails to amaze me. I can say with upmost certainty that you are able to get into her head better than any writer has managed so far. Your characterization of Kaname actually makes her a 'real' character. Most other characterizations of her, with the exception of a very, very few, make her into a character that could never truly exist outside of a deep fictitious world. I have to congratulate you on a job very well done on that front.
There was much less of Sousuke in the fic, but you still wrote him very good. There wasn't much of an insight into what was going on inside of his head like there was for Kaname, but the mentioning of Sousuke's actions and reactions seemed to work just as good. Especially since Sousuke's running train seems to be 'actions speak louder than words.' The mentioning of his nightmares and tight, protective nature seemed right on to me. That's very much how I perceive his character too.
A small gripe I have with the story is a bit of a lack in setting. I know they have an apartment a few years after they are out of school, but that's about it. I understand perfectly that setting is not a major focus in this story, nor should it be. However, by using just a few words to trigger any of the five senses, you can greatly heighten the feeling of the story. Setting can play a key role in just about anything you go to write. This is not to say that I think the lack of setting takes away from the enjoyment of the story, but I do believe it would have added something to it.
There's one other thing that I have a problem with. After reading over you story a few times, it seems to me that Kaname voiced her thoughts to Sousuke about the children 'way' too soon. I'm definitely in no position to hammer 'you' on Kaname's character, but I believe that this is more of a problem that would pertain to anyone and not just Kaname. With the way it's written, Kaname didn't spend anywhere near enough time thinking about it herself before talking to Sousuke about it. In order for it to seem realistic, she should have probably spent at least the good portion of the day, possibly even days, thinking about the possibility of her and Sousuke having children. I know that you mentioned that she had been thinking about 'children' for the past few days, but that's still not quite the same. Now, I know that you couldn't possibly put everything that would run through someone's head down on paper, but if you had simply mentioned that she had given contemplation to the idea some over the past few days while also thinking about the children in general, it would be perfectly fine in my book. My point is that she actually only spent a few minutes in the kitchen thinking about what her and Sousuke's life would be like with a child before she threw the idea to him just shortly after he got back. I'm sorry if I'm being too critical about something so small, but it really nags me for some reason.
But, I will congratulate you on nailing Sousuke's reaction perfectly. I could just imagine the gong going off in his head when Kaname mentioned kids to him. That was perfect.
Overall, you did a really good job with this story. You have a knack for making fictional characters seem so human. Not many people can do that with these two. I'm really impressed. I would also like to mention in closing that the sarcastic comments, thoughts, etc. in the story really adds flavor to it. It's definitely one of great points of your style. As always, I look forward to reading more work from you.
Keep up the good work.