|Reviews for Always|
| Ambrosia chapter 1 . 6/4/2005
Oh, it's interesting that u actually say that the Ellimist and Crayak *are* God and Satan, bcoz if u remember ur sunday school stories rightly (i think i hope i do), isn't the story of satan's origin actually that he started out as one of God's favourite angels, and then blahbyblah can't remember but he did something Evil and was condemned to spend eternity running hell or sumthing..? Oh, but wot a trippy story u cld cook up applying *that* recipe 2 the crayak & ellimist base..!
oops, spelling..! "The widow of the car wasn't exactly a pillow," u meant wiNdow i think... spellcheck cn never c those.
Ew! Okay, i know that in some places 1st cousin on cousin action isn't considered incestuous enuff 2 b illegal tho i can't grasp y exactly... still, EWW! WHY rachel, WHY jake?
Oh, back back 2 the slightly less disturbing matter of spellcheckering; "but fell backwards out of the war," out of the war..? Really..?
But anyways. Ur story, it was... ~shrugs~... i don't get it... u have the future from the books, jake sees it, weird kissin cousins moment, and then it happens exactly the way u & number the one b4 the last showdown in space sed, and..? What's the point..? Y did Drode show jake the future, if he wldn't even try 2 do anything about it? Y 4 that matter, do u think that seeing a futuristic vision of Jake ordering his cousin to go on a kamikaze mission wld give him the urge 2 rush over 2 her house & make out with her..? And she just stood there and took it, the hoebag! Wot, did she suppose she was following orders or she 4got who tobias was for a moment or she was living the unconscious oedipal dream of getting sexy with her father, which was awakened with the combination of her father's presence and then jake marching in being all authoritative..? the whole thing just left me totally... confused... i mean, the plot's pretty black & white, but i just don't get the WHY of it all..
| animorph19 chapter 1 . 5/31/2005
great, brilliant, awesome...i'm not big on incest, but you pull it off very well. keep writing!