|Reviews for Wondering|
| Psychobikerjunkiewhore chapter 1 . 5/4/2009
Hahah. I really enjoyed this actually - I have only just fallen in love with the Brittas Empire and bought the boxset :)
This littl piece made me laugh - Sadly I am a barrie lover and was searching for some sort of Gordon love ficcy but havent found any yet heheh.
Will look at your other works!
| Nomi's Secret chapter 1 . 4/19/2009
i love this!
you can perfectly put the characters thoughts, feelings and actions in the right way!
| Stormkpr chapter 1 . 6/18/2005
I've never seen Britta's Empire but you know I love your writing and so I had to check this out. I liked it a lot. A delicate, well-written glimpse of two women discussing possibilities. I can't comment on the characterization since I haven't seen the show, but I feel that even within this brief fic I am starting to get to know them well. Very lovely fic. I will always be a fan of your writing no matter what the fandom is.
| Bitz chapter 1 . 6/14/2005
Hi, me again.
Sorry for leaving this here, which is a fandom I do not know, so did not read. This ridiculous site doesn't let you review more than once, even when you don't have an account! Anyway, I thought some more about your writing, which I do enjoy very much. I think I was not clear enough when I left feedback for "Bad".
I've gone through and read all of your Sweet Valley's and some Pokemon, and about giggled myself into a corner to see femmeslash Enid Blyton stories, because *really*, how perfect. I read those books as a child and never gave the relationships a second thought. In fact, I rather wished that I had a friend that close. But to read these now is like the proverbial scales have fallen from my eyes - how utterly *right*. Bless your heart for writing them.
I got off track there, didn't I? Here's the thing. Your descriptive prose is simply marvellous; you have an eye for turn of phrase and lovely metaphor. Your characterisations are beautiful and very deft. I enjoy the way in which you illustrate a wholeness with very small touches. The only problem that I find with your writing is the innate passiveness with which I read it. These are not stories I engage with, these are stories I am dictated. There's literally nothing left to the imagination. You control *every* last thing - eyelid flutters, trembles, hands shaking, whispers, breaths, thoughts, *unconscious* thoughts, all of it. There is nothing for me to do but read. You'll probably find a lot of people would disagree with me on this, but as a reader, I do not find that I need every last detail and blush to deeply connect with a character.
I enjoy the way you delve into your characters emotions, but I find at the same time your portrayal of them to be uber-controlling. To illustrate: if I were to say the words "an old wooden box on a dusty table in a sunlit room", you'd pretty much have a picture of it, wouldn't you. No matter if your picture is different from mine, no matter if your picture is different from the *author's*. You still see that box. Reading your stories is like haveing the box described to me in every last detail - hinges, scratches, the quality of the light or lack of it, right down to the individual grains of dust on the table.
For somebody advising a little minimalism, I don't seem to be capable of it myself, do I? So I shall end here. I just beg of you; please use your talent to actually let *go* a little. Trust your readers to work some things out for themselves. Let us engage with your stories rather than submissvely have them read to us.
Bitz (no account, avid reader, not a writer, 36, Hertfordshire)
| Julie Ann Pope chapter 1 . 6/1/2005
Wonderful stuff, i'd always wondered about the relationship between Helen and Laura, esp when Laura was offered a promotion and Helen was so desperate to stop her leaving. I think Laura and Helen could easily swing both ways. Great idea and very sensitively written. Well Done.