Reviews for A Lovely Delirium |
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![]() ![]() I really liked your story. Just one thing. He'd been with plenty virgins? Do he was walking around popping everyone's cherries? :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent work with this story! |
![]() ![]() Great story. Maybe consider getting a beta to refine the writing. You have a great plot but it was just hard to read and I found myself scanning through the paragraphs just to get to the point. Also getting a second opinion helps with technical things like how to properly heal a wound. I would expect H to be knowledgeable in first aid unless you were aiming for her to be OOC? Surely on a mission like this they would have mini first aids with them and a bottle of dittany? H also seems utterly useless in this adventure fic. And then there seems to be a rush in their romance. It was just so sudden I had to backtrack a few paragraphs to see where that sudden intense feeling of love came from? He was so delirious he realized he’s in love? Hmm.. I guess that explains the title. But then she decides to give her virginity. H was perhaps also in delirium. That just blew my mind. Surely there are other ways to keep the man awake? And then it gets better, being the of course unintentional git that he is, and being delirious too of course, D slams it in without thought or consideration for the love of his life? Yes, very convincing Malfoy. I applaud your slytheriness. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it! Excellent writing |
![]() ![]() ![]() By any chance do u have another story like this one? |
![]() ![]() ![]() cute story |
![]() ![]() I am really hating this version of Hermione who doesn't have any more sense than a 5 yr old who doesn't know that sound travels and has absolutely no self control. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good story. I love the words she spells out and repeats here. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Merlin and Morgana? The couple more angsty than these two? Brilliant cursing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Amazing story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my god! This so good! Such an interesting plot snd such great characterizations of D&H. This is so sort yet sp full of do much emotion and drama. Bravo! I only wish it were longer. |
![]() ![]() yay! :) this makes me so happy! i'm a sucker for a happy ending...:) |
![]() ![]() I loved this :) I think you do pretty well with the limited time frames during exchanges :) |
![]() ![]() Hmmm, this is interesting... |
![]() ![]() Awesome chapter! :) |