|Reviews for Mastermind Hunting|
| XxLonelyShadowSpiritxX chapter 40 . 2/27
This story was absolutely amazing! I really enjoyed it and couldn't put it down. I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep up the fantastic writing! :)
| Calem de Vaniville chapter 10 . 2/23
The racism continues. Not all Black British men have dreadlocks. Most of them look no different from black men in other countries.
| Calem de Vaniville chapter 5 . 2/23
Great. More racist stereotyping. Salim is an Arabic name - the Turkish form is Selim. Istanbul is NOT that dangerous, and you basically portray Turkish men as a bunch of animals.
| Calem de Vaniville chapter 2 . 2/23
Wow...this story is so racially charged. Very rude stereotypes of Americans and Chinese/
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/18
Got this story recommended on a very old discussion. :)
| Fullmetal11791 chapter 30 . 2/16
As a personal opinion, I thought that this story was doing quite nicely up until you made Harry a teacher. I really can't stand the stories where Harry gets a group of peers together and process's to have every single answer and becomes a teacher to them for everything: and, in this story, that's literally what's happened. I don't even understand why at this point you have Ron, Ginny, Hermione and now Susan in the group. They provide absolutely nothing to the story. Even Tracy at this point has been hugely marginalized because of Harry's teaching post. To top that off, I know Harry has the ability to grow an additional two arms, but seriously, how many weapons does he need? You've made him a Jack-of-Trades, user of all, master of none. Well, I guess that technically he IS a master of the weapons in this story due to the Godlike legilimancy... But seriously. He has two bows, two cross bows with more types of ammo than you would ever need, let along that are going to be used in the story. He's got like three daggers, three swords , a long sword, a staff/sword/ring thing, another ring focus, and seven of eight wands. Seriously, what the hell does he need even HALF of that for? Sure it's a nice collection, but as far as practicality goes, you aren't using them in the story.
I really enjoyed the first half of this, but revealing who he was to a ton of people served no purpose, and no one in the story brings any value to the plot besides Harry himself. That's not to say that parts of the story now aren't enjoyable, I really liked the idea of having the four (well, three) horsemen of the apocalypse show up, but the enjoyment I'm getting out of this now is few and far between, and it's become a chore to read. I'll probably finish it eventually, but definitely need to take a break from this for now.
| Fullmetal11791 chapter 26 . 2/13
...why wouldn't Harry just fade into the gas realm at the end there, regrow his arm, and pop out when Lestrange moved?
| hpf2114 chapter 40 . 2/13
| JlovesGaara chapter 3 . 2/13
This fic is way too confusing. Too much jumping around.
| Fullmetal11791 chapter 14 . 2/10
Really enjoying this so far, but that's probably because the 11 year olds are written with the personalities, cunning, whit and humor of those much older than them. If you were trying to write real eleven year olds, well, you have failed horribly lol. If you were trying to write an engaging story with great characters, you've definitely done a good job so far. None of the eleven year olds act like kids, and aside from Harry walking into people having sex, none of them are showing any teenage angst. So while it's much more interesting to read about eleven year olds with the personalities of, say, a twenty one year old sans sex/alcohol, it's somewhat unrealistic.
| Fullmetal11791 chapter 11 . 2/10
Haha poor Dumbledore! He's definitely one of my favorite characters, if not my favorite, in the HP verse. Here's hoping you give him his magic back.
| Fullmetal11791 chapter 8 . 2/9
Well if I've interpreted this correctly, Harry ISNT going godmode, and that was just for some random Aztec god free for all on a plane. Huh. Throw in Samuel L Jackson and you get Snakes on a Plane... Ba Dum Tish.
Jokes aside, glad that godmode isn't happening, at least this early in the story.
| Fullmetal11791 chapter 7 . 2/9
I feel like we've went from "Harry is really talented in mind magic and has some cool skills" to "Harry is a god". Most stories like that suffer from a lack of antagonist that can present a real challenge, and end up flopping. Really hope that isn't the case here, and I've really enjoyed this up til now.
| Fullmetal11791 chapter 5 . 2/9
Really like your writing style. At first, all the flash forwards were a bit confusing, but after getting used to them, i find that it's working quite well. It's a somewhat foreboding thought that now the president is interested in Harry, but well see how that plays out i guess.
| Fullmetal11791 chapter 2 . 2/8
On the one hand, I've been looking for ages for a well written HP story that uses both magic and martial arts. Even if that doesn't play a big part in the story, it was an awesome chapter. On the other hand, what the hell was Draco Malfoy doing in china hahah. I guess this is not cannon compliant at all, will keep that in mind.