Reviews for Mastermind Hunting
FirePhoenixofHogwarts chapter 20 . 12/31/2018
Happy New Years Everyone!
Charlie0925 chapter 40 . 12/31/2018
Wow, wow, wow, WOW! Geez, this was a truly brilliant read! Phenomenal writing here hun! Seriously, this was one of THE BEST fics I have ever read, and I've read a lot! Awesome job! ;o)
FirePhoenixofHogwarts chapter 16 . 12/25/2018
Hagrid is a half giant.
FirePhoenixofHogwarts chapter 15 . 12/25/2018
Mrytle Warren was the ghost's name.
FirePhoenixofHogwarts chapter 13 . 12/23/2018
Someone is addicted to
Sungazing chapter 40 . 12/21/2018
Fascinating story. The ending was rather well... It left me curious. Very unique. Thank you for your contribution.
FirePhoenixofHogwarts chapter 12 . 12/21/2018
Room of Requirement no s on the end.
Sungazing chapter 39 . 12/21/2018
Hahaha! Wow. This chapter was amazing.
Sungazing chapter 38 . 12/21/2018
Astonishing how far things have come. Wonderful.
Sungazing chapter 37 . 12/21/2018
Great work on this chapter.
all forms of fluff chapter 38 . 12/21/2018
First time through.

First I would like to say that I loved the language you used...for the most part. It was clear that the words used weren't spoken by an English speaking person, which was cool when it was just Harry and his family and he was importing languages into his brain. It made for a believable lexicon of language. It got irritating and considerably less cool when the native English speakers were using the same words and phrases. Word choice aside I have enjoyed the story...for the most part. It was really interesting and engaging but derailed for me after Harry's second year at Hogwarts. He progressed to much and none of his "friends" kept pace, he was also effectively one of the heads of his house hold well before that, and his "Masters" just kept giving him knowledge and gear for no discernible reason. Goken offering him an apprenticeship, believable. Goken giving him one of every magical weapon less then a month into his "training", is bullshit. Now I could see Goken actually doing this. From a certain prospective Harry was to be another sword of the emperor and the boy's unique way of learning and progressing would have been an asset. But Harry turning around and giving that knowledge to others who are most definitely NOT going to be swords of the emperor would be a huge breach of trust and respect to his own sensai. This should have caused a falling out and repercussions for Harry but he just got more magic weapons for his "Friends". You did however have an option to actually have Harry have a mentor, someone who could magically counter and teach without the boy copy and pasting what he want's from their mind. But you killed Flamel off in the most mundane of ways. Then there is the opposition. Riddle and the Agents. Honestly Riddle was boring to read. He didn't have any plans. He didn't forward any agenda. How did this guy keep getting followers when he never once won? The Agents were more of threat because even without magic they were countering Harry and forcing him to run.

Personally I would have liked to see Harry running from the agents for longer then he did. Making honing his mind and body away from magic, never even finding out about magic until he is confronted by death eaters and forced to learn about magic. Because the biggest gripe I have with this story is that Harry is thirteen. Now I can get behind the Metamorphmagus and Mental Magics that he can preform being able to age him up believably. But borrowed experience isn't actually experience. You had a chance to make a wizarding world where the wizards weren't backwards and loony seeming. To show how the wizarding world in a different away from the schools where magic is wonderious and new and exciting and show how wizards who worked "outside" the closed off wizarding world would actually fit in. Where flash and flare mean you screwed up and your wand is just a piece of equipment like a cell phone.

That's the big regret I have on this story. Voldemort simply wasn't...just simply wasn't. At no point did I find him interesting or threating. NO, I take that back. When the demons were summoned, that opened up some interesting things. Then there was Flamel's oath and how he skirted it with Harry doing the fighting, and Harry actually becoming a warrior. But then he puts three of them down in a single fight, and the next time he faces harsher demons he has to babysit the completely useless Order members who followed him and did nothing but stand there and wait to be rescued. Other then that moment I just couldn't take Voldemor and his Deatheaters any more serious then Bowser and his kupa.

I know I come off as ranty in this review, but I have been pushing myself to keep reading ever since the Angel showed up and outed Harry to the Order. It was like you couldn't even find a way for someone to out fox a thirteen year old kid. But now I'm two chapters away from finishing and I just can't. The Horcruxes feel tacked on at this point and you gave barely any lip serves to them in your story so their inclusion seems pointless. You could have stopped at the diary and Harry, with maybe the ring as something Voldemort always wore. Something that could be passed around to prove that the one wearing it is The Dark Lord. But having all of the Horcruxes researched, found and destroyed in less then a week's story time, sort of makes the whole thing pointless.

Sorry about the negativity. I actually love your take on Harry. It's something I haven't seen before and it really impressed me. The only thing that comes close to being as badass as your boy is a time traveler who has already been though it all before and is just wrecking shop. Doging Prision and Sealing Witches comes to mind. But they get around the whole kid bad ass by having him being an adult in a child's body. Still It would have been more believable if Harry hadn't joined Hogwarts until his name came out of the goblet of fire and his Magic somehow compelled him to go to the cup and present himself as a champion. It could have then fubared any plans or operations to keep the Agents away and lead them to, if not Hogwarts, then a large gathering of magical people. You could then have had Harry try to team up with the Agents as he wouldn't know any more about the magical world then they would. Then you would have the whole Crowley teaming up with the Winchesters kind of moment where neither side likes it but big shit is going down that could end everybody... Okay now I'm just fanning out on could have beens. Your Story is a great read, followed by an okay read, and ending with a just end already ending. I did have a ball reading and exploring your take on how Harry's personal magic system functions. I would actually like to read more stories about a character like Harry, who isn't a child. If you ever get around to writing professionally. The character you made would be a hell of a protagonist. So if you take anything away from this take that. You created a wonder hero, but failed to delever an equally great villain.

Thank you for your time, and for Sharing this story. It's been a blast.
FirePhoenixofHogwarts chapter 10 . 12/20/2018
Decisions decisions is a line from by Dakota Fanning's character.
FirePhoenixofHogwarts chapter 9 . 12/20/2018
I need some milk
Hopefully not silk
Time to eat
Then find some heat
Sungazing chapter 36 . 12/20/2018
Wow. I had forgotten about the Triwizard Quidditch Tournament. After all the excitement that happened during flipping third year we get this to end it. Amazing work. Well done.
FirePhoenixofHogwarts chapter 7 . 12/19/2018
Ideals are peaceful
History is violent.
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