Pennyless? Ron isaWizard . You meant Knutless.

Room of Requirement. No S !

Desisions Desisions is Twilight movies not Harry potter

Not everyone gets their wand at ollivanders. There is another wand shop in Knockturn ally.

You can become magic .You don't have to be born magic. A magic personthat has powerful magic can give a percentage of thiermagic to you . It would change your looks also into being looking like a relative of that person. The magic would take a whole week to get to 100% .

Its one wizrd and a witcg not two alisonis a witch .

Thier immortal they dont die

Bob has no job.

Your storytelling is excellent. Great action, believable characters with real emotions. Wonderful mix between conversation and plot progression. I thoroughly enjoyed the way you tied modern history into the Harry Potter universe. This could be a stellar story.

However, the whole thing reads like a translation. Not a very good one. Misused verb tenses (particularly between the simple past and the past progressive), mistaken words (one does not ‘take’ a decision, they ‘make’ a decision), and often just not the word order or phrasing a native English speaker would ever use (we do not ‘discuss about’, we simply ‘discuss’. To ‘come home’ is not the same as to ‘go home’. One is not ‘true’, they are ‘right’ or ‘correct’). The same errors appear over and over and over again.

Your imagination is wonderful. Your grammar is not. The story itself is quite compelling. I kept reading, regardless of the ubiquitous grammar mistakes, because your characters and plot are unique and engaging.

I might not, necessarily, like the direction you take the characters but that’s your choice as an author. I found your ending to be particularly unsatisfying.

English is an exceedingly complex language and is not easy to master. You have made a great effort, but could clearly use some help. Keep reading, writing and learning the idiosyncrasies of the language. Please, keep sharing, because you have interesting ideas.

I dunno what to think at this point man. I mean that was... that was just a completely different freaking story. That... that didn't give any resolution or if it did, it lasted for like two paragraphs before zooming off into outer freaking space.

All in all, I really enjoyed the creativity and uniqueness of this fic. It went a lot of places that I haven't seen before and a lot of them I really enjoyed. Still, you coulda just given us a nice wrap up of who got married and who had kids and... heck maybe a reuniting with James and Lily and something about Luna. But no. You gave us like... a sentence each for what some people are doing now and that Ginny and Neville end up together.

I loved so much of this story but with this... now I'm just stuck feeling so unresolved. You've spent an entire story with ONE person dying in the next to last chapter and two travel-in-time saves, even breaking your own established time travel rules for the second one and then just... oops Tracey died. Oops Harry killed a bunch of people. Oops completely different source material. Just like... agggghghdgfjkdfbgnjkaslkgn

So... so after all of this... the only permadeath out of Harry's group is flipping Luna?! What the hell man, what did she ever do to deserve this?!

I can safely say that a fic has never elicited more shock, confusion, and simply stunned laughter than this one and I'm not even through this chapter yet! I truly cannot wait to see where the rest of this goes and I thank you for this wonder I haven't gotten from stories in a while. Bravo to you

honestly. it kinda... no. it's fucked up how Harry's mind controlling an old lady for entertainment.

How tf does Harry still not know stupefy when he's seen it used multiple times?

How much longer is he going to be such a pushover. He could've gotten Snape arrested a half dozen times by now.