Reviews for Poems wrote under the starry sky
Trapped in Reality chapter 8 . 5/6/2011
It's hard to give critique on poetry, especially free form poetry. But I would like to point out Fanfiction ate some of your formatting or something because your explanations are not separated from your poetry. Poetry is an expression, so you need to express adequately. Think about your word choice, what is the purpose of that word? If it proves to do nothing for the poem, get rid of it. And the excessive exclamation marks make me cringe.

You have some really nice imagery that you could expand on. I'm pretty new to writing poetry, so I know how difficult it is. I see most of your poetry is free form. I suggest expanding to other forms of poetry to get a real feel for poetry.

"Tango" is my favorite. :)

I'm pretty sure this is a dead account, since you haven't posted anything since 06, but maybe someone will see this review or something, and it'll help him/her.
RedLina chapter 8 . 8/1/2006
Not a Shayera fan - not as fiery as you anyway, but I understand the feeling. :) Good job, can't wait to read more!
HawkAngel XD chapter 8 . 7/12/2006
wo... what a poem... o.o... jejejej hey girl! what's up?... sorry for not you the last time... I was in a great pressure, 'cause of the school, exams... all that stuff... uh but now I'am in vacations, so I can talk to you by the msn... I put you in my blist... but I don't know if you agree my invitation... S... uuhu you me later okay?... take care!...

HawkAngel
HeavenShallBurn chapter 3 . 6/14/2006
I luffed these. Awesome.
HawkAngel XD chapter 7 . 9/3/2005
wa pretty good!... and pretty go the Flash fic too!... ok, update soon!... and one suggest... do the HGGL with a lot of fluff!... yeah!... ok, that's all...

take care!

hugs!

HawkAngel
Ember Witch chapter 6 . 8/17/2005
Awesome job! Your best work yet. This is a great poem because people can relate to it. This is another one of the perks to poetry. You can express so many things that people can relate to but don't always express themselves. Keep up the good work, I will remain one of your loyal reviewers. And if I none of my stories appear, please feel free to email me. Chances are I still haven't gotten it figured out yet. I know that I probably seem extremely stupid...but I'm not the smartest when it comes to computers.
HawkAngel XD chapter 6 . 8/17/2005
hey! very good poem... ... hey I have some comment... I have a Inuyasha fic... in english... is a SessRin... can you read it?.. the name of it is "Iris"... hope you can read it... ... anyway... take care, and update soon, both fics heh!

HawkAngel
HawkAngel XD chapter 5 . 8/17/2005
wa the same has the other review... GREAT!

HawkAngel
HawkAngel XD chapter 4 . 8/17/2005
wa so sorry! I don't leave you reviews!... i'm really deeply care of my high school... no time for reading... wa T_TU... ok, this poems are great!... let me pass to the other ones...

HawkAngel
Ember Witch chapter 5 . 8/15/2005
Yes you updated! I am very pleased, I was starting to wonder what had become of you. Anyway nice job. every time I read your work is just as good or better than the last. My favorite poem was Tango, you really captured the setting for it. My work should be up soon...I hope. I got some help from my cousin. I followed her directons, but I think I'm forgetting something. Do you have to do anything else after submitting a story? As you can see I struggle with modern tech. Anyway awesome job! Your work never ceases to amaze me!
Ember Witch chapter 4 . 7/24/2005
Awesome job! My favortite poems were both of them about Shayera. I believe you captured her feelings well in both of them. Please continue as I look forward to reading your next work of art. P.S I'm hoping to be able to post my stories and poems on here soon. My cousin knows about that kind of thing so she may help me. When I do get them posted I think you would enjoy one of my Shayera poems called Mistress of Masks.
HawkAngel XD chapter 3 . 6/27/2005
very very good! great!

hehehehe miguis... jejejeje maybe you eat a letter... jejejejeje ok... great and enjoy your vacations!

take care, hugs!

HawkAngel
Ember Witch chapter 3 . 6/27/2005
Once again, brillant work! Your teacher must not know true art. There are many types of poetry, and styles of writing. But what makes poetry so unique is how each artist puts their own special spin on it. In my opinon that's what makes it so fun to write...no limits! Keep up the good work. And hopefully I'll get my own stuff on here soon.
Ember Witch chapter 2 . 6/26/2005
I love it! I hope you write more. Your work is amazing! sometime I do hope to get my poems on. But unfortunately I still have to figure out how to post them on here. but I would be honored if you would read them when they are up. Your adivice would be great!and keep up with your writing it's awesome.
HawkAngel XD chapter 2 . 6/23/2005
good poems... !... the poem of Flash... very good... ;)!... kind of late... but anyway... thanks!... hey and what's up, with the fic... "flash a daddy?"... I'm anxious... I need to read it!... Is very very interesting... oU!...

m... my heart is going to be in pieces... when the time comes, and I don't have the opportunity to see him again... ;_;U... my poor situation... and I'm writing all this feelings in a fic... covering with characters... good idea to express myself, right?... o.Ô?... jijiji and that's all I can do right now... and dream... a sweet kiss...

I'm kind of romantic today... jejeje... U... what do you think?

jejejeje...

take care, hugs..!

HawkAngel
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