|Reviews for There Once Was a Time I Was Sure|
| plutospawn chapter 1 . 6/18/2005
Because I enjoyed this so much, I'm going to be nitpicky. There was a tense shift in the 7th paragraph, "...bastard she thinks he is."
Also, "Turning away from her, his eyes sought the sky." Dangling modifiers are a pain in the arse. Did you mean that Piotr physically turned away from her or that his eyes did? Right now, you've got it worded that his eyes are what's turning.
But wow on characterization. Everyone's personality fits, their motivation clear and believable, not pulled from some black pit of wangst and I'm glad that I read it.