Reviews for Hot Water
Guest chapter 1 . 7/12/2017
I like this fanfiction but I can't find the link that has the un cut virson I'm not a writer so I will give u my e-mail
Guest chapter 37 . 3/18/2017
Very great book in general loved zutara and can't wait for u to do more I hope - Anna Svenson
lucel18 chapter 37 . 8/16/2016
Just got into the Zutara fandom recently...your Zutara fics are just sooooooo good. It felt so canon, the characters, their behavior, and so on. Where the cartoon series is lacking, I find it was made up for in your fics. Your fics also made the Avatar world a lot more interesting. And the Zutara romance was hot , and yet sweet, heartwarming, and realistic. Thank you so much for sharing!
Guest chapter 18 . 5/25/2016
I tried reading this, i made it to twenty and could not finish. Everyone is soooo OOC. Zuko would never rape anyone, because honor is way too important to him. I couldn't see katara just forgiving zuko, let alone falling in love with him after burning AND raping her! And definitely! I could absolutely NOT see Iroh idly stand by and let it happen. Or force Katara to return to unbelievable OOC zuko. That would have to be Katara's decision ( which I doubt she would, given her experience with him and the fire nation.) and sokka and Aang would rescue her or die trying. They would not just disappear somewhere unknown, lol. I could go on...
But your writing truly is wonderful, really. It's just that this is very ATLA story. This is more like the dragon and the siren.
Justa L chapter 1 . 4/16/2016
I had a ton of fun reading this fantastic story. I wish I was writing this to praise it, but I can't. The reason is your author's note. No cliches or overused plots, excellent dialog, no OOC ness or mary sues, realistic, not sappy, etc...

Those claims should never be up to the author to make of his/her own work because it can create an unrealistic expectation, not to mention it gives the impression of arrogance [not saying that you are like that!]. Your story did not meet that expectation nor matched the claims. You have no idea, how much I hate saying that about your story because it's one of my favorite Zutara fics. SERIOUSLY. But I have to say it. I hope that you will take my criticism as constructive and not as insult or anything like that.

I understand that Zuko is a fictional character and so is flexible enough for people to write fanfic for him, but come on, no one can deny that he is OOC in this fic. it's not his actions, it's the his personality and his expressions that seem very off. Not to mention inconsistent.

Speaking of inconsistent, the dialog... It's more that most people can do and I can tell you put work into it, I'll give you that, but it is clear that you have a lot to grow as far as your writing goes. Sometimes you have the characters [especially Zuko] expressing themselves in an awkward fashion, with dialog that is prim and proper but lacking the vocab to be believable or smooth. Then is some parts you drop the act for them [inexplicably].

Katara is a Mary Sue...She was a mary sue in the show and she's a mary sue in your fic too. Not to mention, probably the weakest character too. The things she does that are claimed to stem from her rebellious and strong nature, are really just reactions and behavior that would come from literally anybody in her circumstance, and she was way more submissive than most people would be.

I'm gonna go ahead and throw this out there too, but Zuko was a mary sue in the show too...and he was a mary sue in fic. Just because a character does awful things, says awful things, doesn't make that character immune to being held up on that mary sue pedestal as you have so obviously done in this fic and others.

Every time he did something bad or said something bad, there was always some kind of exposition or POV that pretty much served to dunk sugar all over him. Like you were trying really hard for people not to hate Zuko, rather than letting the story be and unfold organically.

Not assuming anything but I'm gonna go ahead and guess you're not a virgin. Have you ever been mad during sex and felt pleasure? I never have, and pretty sure most women haven't either. Heck, if there is even a slight disinterest or distraction, my vagina might as well be dead [sorry for language]. A lot of the sex was fun to read, but a bit unrealistic [if we're gonna hold it up to that standard]. And they served as a tool to prove just how weak Katara was as well. Almost as if she was only throwing hissy fits in order to lie to herself [or others] about what a big girl she was but never really followed through. A lot of the sex, was essentially rape, but it seemed you didn't want readers to think that so you have her succumb to Zuko's dick like it's some kind of enchanted magical penis that momentarily erases memory and negative feelings...*sigh*, no man's penis can do that.

You recently re wrote one of your other Zutara fics, and I was a bit disappointed to find that your writing had no real improvement.

I'm gonna end it here because I think you get my point. I loved this story, but it's equivalent to Twilight and 50 Shades Of Grey. Depending on your goals as a writer, that can either be complement OR if we're going for what you promised in the author's note, it's far from one.

I still love you and you stories, but I needed to be honest here.
jessyvanessawu chapter 37 . 12/2/2015
You are utterly amazing. The script, the story line, the way you write, the funny lemons, thr sweet ones and the lemony lemon ones! Your commitment to finishing this, your imagination, the wholleeeee thing! AMAZING. UTTERLY FANTASTIIQUE! Seriously, congratulations for doing this
Arashi Uzukaze chapter 2 . 6/3/2015
You have Zuko in character. He's always contradicting himself, that was an annoying flaw of his because he lost himself after Ursa was banished. O_O But where is Iroh? I know damn well Iroh would be disapointed in Zuko.
Guest chapter 37 . 6/1/2015
It was a good story. Though sometimes a bit repetitive
AyanneCZ chapter 37 . 10/6/2014
What SammuriKitty said.
Your archive was recommended to me on a youtube channel and I thought I found a decent writer after reading the first few fics.
I could not be more disappointed as I continued reading Hot Water.
It's such a shame to see someone with your writing style (which is great, really, it is), especially after boldly proclaiming "There are no cliches or overused plots. There is excellent dialogue, ... blah blah blah... believable storyline and details.", come to the assumption that rape is somehow attractive and that "It's okay to let it happen".
This is not romance. This is horror. And now I want to erase my memory... :/
nana chapter 37 . 12/25/2013
You are an AMAZING WRITTER. Please don't stop with this works of pure genius. Its so hard to find good work sometimes and when I come across something like what you have written, I am grateful because I cant write something like this on my own. Thank You and keep up the good work! :)
SammuriKitty chapter 37 . 8/13/2013
There are many problems I have with this story. The writing is good, but the only reason I read until the end was for the sheer hope that somehow the story would turn around and stop being so creepy.

Zuko's logic and relationship with Katara is scary and insulting to both characters. I kept waiting for the moment where he would ACTUALLY let her go and learn to give her true freedom, and then Katara to choose to return to him. That's really the only way you could make this whole thing work out and not be overly OOC and have respect for the characters. But no. Katara is Zuko's slave and allows herself to be convinced that he loves her and wants the best for her...but she's never allowed to leave or go anywhere by herself. EVER. Because when you love someone, you totally don't trust them at all right? Wrong.

This story wasn't romantic. It was creepy and scary and sad. I really felt bad for Katara and her unwanted trapped existence in the palace. But apparently rape and confinement are something you can totally get over and you can learn to love your captor if you just "let it happen".

Oh and way to cut off Aang and Sokka's balls. They would have done everything to save Katara if this were the real show.

I hope your future endeavors in fanfiction are better because it would be a treat to read a good story from a good author. This time around, however, I'm left with a bad story and a wasted week of reading.
Selias chapter 1 . 8/13/2013
Jeez, talk about OOC.
Night250 chapter 9 . 8/1/2013
May I ask why can they not get married? too fluffy?
mUmaRhz chapter 37 . 7/19/2013
Loved this story!
Guest chapter 2 . 6/12/2013
There was no reason for him to take her pants AND underwear away... one track mind...

"He remembered the pain of his own burn, and the deeper pain that had come with knowing that his own sire had burned him. His own son! He shook his head slightly, shaking free of these thoughts.
"It is my mark. It is to remind you of who you belong to.""

So, what I'm getting is that he doesn't see the irony in the correlation between his father burning him, and him belonging to his father, and the psychological stress he went through with what he is doing to his self-proclaimed concubine.
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