|Reviews for Secrets Between Friends|
| celena murdock chapter 6 . 9/20/2009
It's sad that you'veabandoned this story. I love it.
| Kubla Khun chapter 6 . 9/6/2005
Sweet! I know that I already told you what I thought but I like adding to your comment count so here see COMMENTAH!
that part between draco and Hermione was so funny! It really did make me laugh out loud! and the weirdness from harry was much enjoyed. Poor nieve harry whats a guy to do?
| Kubla Khun chapter 5 . 8/22/2005
YEAH! Another chapter! I am so happy! Sigh, gotta love the angst. And Colin is so akward ...he has a scrawny as$? Laughs...This was a really good chapter. I like that it jumped around to the different characters...but I found that the little part between Malfoy and Ginny was unremarkable...I mean, was that supposed to affect her more? Because he did not appear particularly malicious or anything just lurky...Anyways I am glad that you have written more...I have to get home today so that I can keep paking...I HATE packing. I like that you added Myrtle by the way. I have always had a soft spot for her. Anyways, really good chapter, and I like what you added about Harry and Colins ahh encounter of the kinky kind? Snikker...Well bye Justin!
| Achlys-Lydia chapter 3 . 7/2/2005
Colin is a GAY?
Oh -_-" Now it's quite complicated; still, please keep Harry safe TTOTT
I'm waiting for more updates, Jia You!
It's Jaru here!
| Somigliana chapter 3 . 6/29/2005
Firstly, thanks for your lovely review of "Mirrored Fascination". I'm also a new writer (that is only my second piece)and it is very encouraging when your work is appreciated! I'm not yet sure if I'll be continuing it, or leaving it as a one-shot - that is this weekend's topic of introspection.
I did go off and read your HP story - and I must say that it was a refreshing change from my current Snape obsession (I just can't help myself, I swear!).
I like where I think/sense this story is leading. I'm curious about a lot of your plot: what Hermione had to tell Harry, whether Ginny is additionally attracted to Malfoy or Colin (I'm guessing Malfoy), and Colin's sexuality. But I suppose all will be revealed in time - patience is not one of my virtues!
I'm guessing that if Ginny and Colin are both attracted to Harry, there may be some issues in future chapters - that will be an interesting read.
Your writing style is pleasant to read - I'll be watching for your update.
| Kubla Khun chapter 3 . 6/27/2005
Okay so I just must be in an criteaky mood but ayways I will get straight to the matter and since you are a very picky person with your writing I am sure that this wont faze you at all.
In the fourth sentence you use the word SHE like five times...I found this aggrivating and I could not place my finger on why the sentence was bugging me until then, try changing she to the or a or something...
"As she sobbed quietly, she shook." I think that this sentence needs more meat. She shook what? Her heart shaped hinny? Her pet chicken named Mr. Snail? Maybe try something like As she sobbed quietly, her shoulders shook with emotion...or with sadness...or with giggles...well you get the picture. I just think that you would do better to make it more detailed because you already use the short sentences beautifully in the start and then when saying she is confused. It would make them stand out more and I am being a picky Bith.
Okay I really like how you wrote her being upset over her mind replacing Harry with someone else...*wink wink* my frog right? I found it very pretty and perfect.
"Harry smiled, complimenting the soft glow on his face from the dying fire" Okay another question...so his smile is complimenting the fire? ah man I think I mussed that up...one of those sentences I needed to reread...it ends up sounding like his smile compliments the fire and makes it look pretty when you mean more that the fire light makes his smile look pretty...okay more? can you take it punk? Gr!
"Suddenly the fire died out completely." I think that this needs something more...like Suddenly the fire flickered out, casting the room into grey moon lit darkness...ah yeah...hehe opke opke OPKE!
I really liked this chapter, a good combo of angst and the intro of Collins fascination with the boy who needs to get laid...ah lol. (that one was my favorite!) Anyways, two final things...one I hope you take none of my crit to heart because I am a spaz and you are smarter then me anyways you well read Chapters fruit loop! gr lucky brat...and secondly...ahh does Harry equal Cinammon in your mind? Are you taking the belly button from personal experience? giggles...I am the spawn of Satan! Fear my jelly beans! ZAPA!
| Marpessa chapter 2 . 6/21/2005
Good job! You have a beautiful way of explaining things without words and you definitely have a talent for showing the emotions of people. I'd love to see where this goes. Great job!
(Check over once more for errors tho, I have this problem too)
| Kubla Khun chapter 2 . 6/21/2005
hehehe FERRET BOY! I really like this ! Okay wren is not in ramble mood right now but you definately got his meaness down pat...and yes I can see why the line Dumbledore said took a while to pin down. Great chapter! but short...either keeping writing them so quickly or write longer! laughs...She gets better looking when she is mad? hm hehe well draco looks good in any mood, anger spite...lust...sweaty lust...sweaty lusty lust...he is a very complex character! ahem...well I will msn you what I think now! Praise praise! opke...
| Kubla Khun chapter 1 . 6/20/2005
HULLO! I am your first reviewer! YEAH! I really love the emotional level that you reached with this first chapter. Him taking her picture because she was sad and then blushing was nice. OH! And I really dont think that you need a beta...I was just making conversation...This flows rather well, even if the first line is a different way to start the chapter. I never know how to start the chapters though, but you have been writing for so much longer then me that I completely trust your judgement and I cant wait for more! FEED ME MORE! Laughs...so the two like Harry? That is fun...snikker...well good luck with the window drawing! I am so Jelous ! and I hope this is a long enough ramble for you...you will find most peoples comments are sorely lacking...in quanity...well they do for me anyways, except for rootbeer. BYES! Opke Fiend!