Reviews for Dreamer Awakened
Retired Kitkat chapter 1 . 12/27/2014
I was pretty sure I had written you a review and that I had favourited this story a long, long time ago. I guess I was dreaming because I just now realised that I didn't do either. Would you believe me if I told you that this story is so good that I felt the need to print it? I wish you a very Happy New Year!
freedomwings26 chapter 4 . 12/14/2014
How the heck does this story only have 500 reviews? This is my first Blue Seed fan fiction story, and dang, you sure as heck have the characters down.

I should been asleep 43 minutes ago... and I'm so drawn to it I can't stop
arinhel.melleide chapter 1 . 2/27/2014
I have started reading this a number of times and usually stop around the same place and then something else happens and I forget about it for a few weeks and then have to start over again. I do really like this story and am determined to see it through this time around. I just thought i should finally comment on this story because I do seriously enjoy reading it, as it is one of roughly three decent Blue Seed fics out there.
Martin III chapter 47 . 12/3/2012
Very nice finish. I wish it were a little clearer exactly what Momiji did to stop the Tengugaki, but I nonetheless found her incarnation as the Kushinada, and Kusanagi and Murakumo's unification as the dragon, to be enthralling and imaginative. The final battle has faint echoes of the TV series's climax without it being anything like a repeat. Momiji getting Murakumo to protect Kusanagi is an especially good touch, surprising yet in character.

The reappearance of Midori's family is a nice surprise. It adds a very nice touch of humor, and more importantly, serves as a reminder that Midori and Murakumo's relationship does not exist in a vacuum. It makes me wish we could see more of Yuji.

Susano healing Midori is rather deus ex machina, but I'm a sucker for a happy ending, so I'm not too bothered by it. I enjoyed the interactions between Kusanagi and Murakumo; they're as entertaining as reluctant friends as they were as enemies. And the birth of Kusanagi and Momiji's daughter makes a fine ending. (Of course, I *would* think that, given I ended my own fanfic novel with the birth of the protagonists' first child, and a later novella ends with the birth of their second. :) )

And I have to finally congratulate you on writing this fic, and in particular on bringing its plot to a fitting conclusion. The pacing is slow in some of the middle chapters, but the work still stands as a fully-realized work which offers a satisfying continuation of the TV and OVA series. You worked out the issues between Momiji and Kusanagi in a believable, entertaining manner, offered us a great original character in the form of Midori, developed the menacing Murakumo into a reluctant hero, and tied it all into the central plot, an epic and continuously intriguing war against the foe of both human and aragami.

In short, this is one of the best Blue Seed fics out there, and certainly the best one of anything greater than short story length. I'm only sorry that it seemingly took me as long to review it all as it took you to write it; I used to chug out a review of this length every four days on average. Blue Seed deserves a solid body of fan fiction, so it really pleases me that we have an excellent novel-length work like Dreamer Awakened.
Martin III chapter 45 . 11/19/2012
Boy, you'd think Kusanagi would have learned by now that Momiji is going to get involved no matter what, eh? Slow learner, that guy.

The confrontation with Tamanasu certainly did not disappoint. Even knowing that Momiji couldn't possibly defeat him, I kept rooting for her to do all she could, and was kept on the edge of my seat the whole time. Her drawing the flare gun on him while in his grasp is very believably written in spite of her human limitations. And good job on not letting the tension drop with Murakumo's arrival.

You do an especially good job with the personal side of Murakumo in chapter 44. I was afraid that Tamanasu's attack would leave her sterile, and I have to hand it to you for bowing to realism there. There's a poignancy about this news coming at the same time as his son being taken away, and there's more great characterization of Koume. Though I have to say, her dialogue in the two paragraphs where she tells about the doctor's news doesn't sound like her; the vocabulary is unnecessarily advanced (e.g. "atrophy", "conceive"), and the phrasing is rather formal. But Momiji's subsequent conversation with Murakumo stands among some of the best character interactions in this novel. It's very understated, but it reflects a lot on Murakumo's feelings and the strong, almost humorous contrast between him and Momiji.

Some noticeable errors:
1."as her shot open." Obviously a typo.
2."I've already discussed this with the President." Surely you mean "with the Prime Minister"?
3."she succinctly replied the succinct reply" Some redundancy there.
4."he yelled, Let's see you eat this, you slimy trash bag!" The quotation marks are missing.
5."What that movement she heard" Another typo.

Another great action sequence on Mr. Futeki's bike - better than the first, actually, and no less fresh for it being the second one. The arrival at the station is a little hard to follow, but still thrilling. Looking forward to getting a moment to read the conclusion!
Martin III chapter 43 . 10/25/2012
Wow. You built things up to a finale in the past couple chapters, and these two certainly delivers that in full force. It's always a struggle for me to put my characters into situations that seem nearly hopeless, but that's clearly not a problem for you. The Tengugaki's swarming over the city catches our heroes off-guard in the most interesting and thrilling ways, and the plot moves more than fast enough to keep one riveted. I'm shocked that it took you nearly a year to follow up on these two chapters, as their momentum is incredible.

I like how you open Chapter 41 with some bits of normalcy that come off very natural and believable: Murakumo's conversation with Midori, the helpful short woman, the brief exchanges between Momiji and the storage clerk. These all make the cataclysm to follow all the more of a jolt. And of course, the short woman also provides a nice means of cluing Midori in to her pregnancy. I have to also give you credit for making all these briefly appearing, unnamed characters solid personalities.

Ah, and Momiji is reckless as ever. Though with the situation she's been thrust into, taking such actions seems almost the most logical thing to do. Anyway, her escapade kept me hooked till the end of the chapter: her fears and frustration, the elevator escape, the traffic jams, the confrontation with the motorcyclist. Everything is fast-paced, intense, and free of contrivance. Classic adventure stuff.

You write Kusanagi and Murakumo's unhappy alliance just beautifully, sacrificing neither one's pride and pigheadedness. I only wish there were more of it here, though the appearances by Kunikada and Koume are appreciated as well. Kusanagi's reasoning out of the Tengugaki's plan is enlightening as well.

Momiji's bike ride is another splendid action scene. It may seem an odd compliment, but you do an especially good job with Futeki's exclamations. It punctuates their danger and desperation. And Tamanasu's final attack on Midori carries a heavy sense of helplessness.

Just a few mini-problems:
1."Midori had ogled at him for a few long seconds, held speechless by his surprising observations," This is pretty redundant - "ogled", "held speechless", and "surprising" are all emphasizing the same thing.
2."She'd known that had made little since," A typo.
3."Alarmed he threw a quick sideways glance at her over his shoulder." This sentence really doesn't add anything, and in fact I'd go so far as to say that all the lapses into Futeki's perspective could be avoided.

Another great cliffhanger end. You've kept me hoping and hoping all through these chapters that Momiji will be able to save Midori and her baby - guess I'll find out next chapter if she makes a difference at all. The real nail-biter is, make it in time or not, what can Momiji do to stop Tamanasu?
Martin III chapter 41 . 9/19/2012
I quite like these two chapters. There's a definite sense of warming up for the final act.

The opening incident where Momiji the bride encounters the old couple is amusing, not in that it's funny of itself, but in the very natural way it points out the humor in Momiji's situation and sets up some of the later banter with Kusanagi. His initial conflict with her over Midori is the best part, though. You remember that Kusanagi can easily be insensitive - I love the line "To his way of thinking, they should have been in the bedroom no more than thirty seconds after he'd walked in" - and his enmity against Murakumo plays into this nicely. His teasing about the stripper thing is also very in-character, and pulled off in good taste. I have to say that he seems too emotionally wise when he remonstrates her about Midori, though.

Speaking of whom, your account of her in solitude has a very cozy melancholy to it that makes it ironically pleasurable to read. The descriptions have a warmth to them all by themselves. The tone of the scene leads smoothly into her reconciliation with Murakumo, which itself works well because it's not at all rushed. A bit sentimental, perhaps, but you've portrayed Murakumo so convincingly that unexpected behavior like this feels almost natural. If someone had told me this was going to happen to him in this fic, I'd have been skeptical of its quality, but you plainly did it not for visceral reasons, but because it works with her character.

The scene with Kaede and Susano is mainly foreshadowing, but I like his rationale for non-interference. It's probably not a decision most humans would have made, but it is quite logical. It seems pretty clear from the previous scene that Tamanasu has found a child by Midori and Murakumo, so it's obviously not a decision Momiji would have made! I'm rather hoping that the kid will escape his fate somehow, but I don't see how it could happen.
Martin III chapter 39 . 8/15/2012
So Murakumo, back at Midori's. The idea of this scene might be considered trite, but you write it such that it doesn't feel that way. Great layers of detail make this interesting to delve into, and even re-read. You're still doing a great job with Murakumo, tapping into what emotion he has without over-sentimentalizing him.

The bedroom interplay between Momiji and Kusanagi has good warmth and intrigue to it for the most part. However, this does make it all the more frustrating that most of Momiji's dialogue in the scene is so uncharacteristically stiff and formal, especially during her story about her mother and the Kushinada's role. That said, you do an amazing job building drama and interest around Kusanagi's black eye. The elusive manner in which he answers Momiji's questions had me both chuckling and increasingly intrigued. The story behind the eye more than satisfies, and fits perfectly with both Kunikada and Sakura's characters. The move back to Tokyo makes a nice twist as well.

Chapter 38 has an exceptionally large number of confusing typos: "so that she could stand a stretch her back.", "Kaede had wanted her to take protect Noa," "the gentle smile the curved her mouth and the warmth that lit her brown as", "how Midori tensed when she his name", "staying with the Kunikida's tonight?"", "not wanting to talk about it what."

The opening hunt with Kusanagi and Murakumo is a great way to catch the reader up on events from during the jump in time, as well as being an interesting read of itself. The dynamic between the two of them when they're forced to work together is handled very authentically, and Kusanagi's wit and unrestrained temperament are at their peak.

The catchup with Momiji and Midori is a bit more tedious and not as well integrated with the scene. Still, lines like "But he needed his rest more than she needed reassurance," have a soft, subtle sentimentality that's very pleasing.

The effect of the new ceramics is an interesting touch, particularly in how it doesn't serve as an easy, straightforward advantage.

I enjoyed the wedding. You seem to have done your research on traditional Japanese customs, not that I would know. But if you just faked it, at the least you did a convincing job of it! Having the wedding take place as Susano-oh Memorial Park is a nice touch, but continuity-wise and in terms of scenery.

Overall a terrific pair of chapters. Momiji's connection to and concern for Midori is always felt strongly, and even if it were only for Momiji's sake I'd be concerned for what's going to happen to the poor girl now.
Martin III chapter 37 . 7/20/2012
(Please delete the identical review that I posted right as FF dot net logged me off. Grr.)

Hmm, well... I have to say chapter 35 doesn't pick up the plot, but chapter 36 certainly makes up for lost time. I'm overall pleased with these chapters and excited about where this fic is heading.

The opening banter between Momiji and Kusanagi is amusing; I got a kick out of the line "Are you starting a new fashion trend? Undergarments for the indecisive?" I don't care much for the sexual content, though... While you put in enough characterization to elevate it well above mere lemon, ultimately I don't think it was necessary for any of it to be explicit.

It's about time you got back to Midori's dilemma, and you really pick things up here, beginning with some final reflections from Midori herself, then teasing her imminent confrontation with Kunikada, and right on to her tense conversation with Momiji. The story suffers a bit from being in omniscient perspective, but even so, Midori's attempts to evade questioning keep things interesting and real. I love the way Momiji is able to get more information out of her than she was willing to give.

I may have said so before, but Kunikada is one of my absolute favorite Blue Seed characters, and this treatment here is just wonderful. You've got his mannerisms and, more subtly, his fatherly approach in dealing with his subordinates down pat. That "light, comforting squeeze" at the end is pure Kunikada. Great stuff, and it brings the subplot of Midori's secret to a most satisfying conclusion. Like I said, great pacing for a single chapter.

And on top of that, you fit in some good action sequences at the end! Nice.

You had a very tricky task to pull off with Murakumo and Kusanagi's meeting, mainly in that Kusanagi comes to believe him in a credible manner, without resorting to convenient OOC behavior or making it so that Murakumo is "one of the good guys" now. I was a bit worried on that point, so well done for proving my worries to be groundless.
Guest chapter 37 . 7/20/2012
Hmm, well... I have to say chapter 35 doesn't pick up the plot, but chapter 36 certainly makes up for lost time. I'm overall pleased with these chapters and excited about where this fic is heading.

The opening banter between Momiji and Kusanagi is amusing; I got a kick out of the line "Are you starting a new fashion trend? Undergarments for the indecisive?" I don't care much for the sexual content, though... While you put in enough characterization to elevate it well above mere lemon, ultimately I don't think it was necessary for any of it to be explicit.

It's about time you got back to Midori's dilemma, and you really pick things up here, beginning with some final reflections from Midori herself, then teasing her imminent confrontation with Kunikada, and right on to her tense conversation with Momiji. The story suffers a bit from being in omniscient perspective, but even so, Midori's attempts to evade questioning keep things interesting and real. I love the way Momiji is able to get more information out of her than she was willing to give.

I may have said so before, but Kunikada is one of my absolute favorite Blue Seed characters, and this treatment here is just wonderful. You've got his mannerisms and, more subtly, his fatherly approach in dealing with his subordinates down pat. That "light, comforting squeeze" at the end is pure Kunikada. Great stuff, and it brings the subplot of Midori's secret to a most satisfying conclusion. Like I said, great pacing for a single chapter.

And on top of that, you fit in some good action sequences at the end! Nice.

You had a very tricky task to pull off with Murakumo and Kusanagi's meeting, mainly in that Kusanagi comes to believe him in a credible manner, without resorting to convenient OOC behavior or making it so that Murakumo is "one of the good guys" now. I was a bit worried on that point, so well done for proving my worries to be groundless.
Guest chapter 35 . 7/4/2012
I'm amazed that no one's commented on the engagement yet. Was it a second draft addition? Whatever the case, it took me a bit by surprise. Part of it is that there's not much of a lead up to it, but the source material itself always made it hard for me to imagine Momiji and Kusanagi actually getting married. Up until he said otherwise, I thought Kusanagi didn't love Momiji, and it's one more testament to the series's brilliance that when he did say it, I believed it. But also, Kusanagi's nature, both biological and social, makes the relationship almost doomed. I'm intrigued to see how far you'll go with this - after all, there are still 11 chapters to go!

Noa drawing on Kusanagi's energy is very interesting; I love those Blue Seed biological mysteries. It fits with what we know about the Aragami but is considerably open to scientific speculation.

The extrapolation on Kusanagi's history is baffling, since in both the TV series and original comic book, Kusanagi first confronts Momiji less than 12 hours after Kaede's death. It's very hard to imagine "a few weeks, perhaps longer" of boozing and fornication fitting into that narrow time slot!

I really wish there had been more to these two chapters than Momiji and Kusanagi's relationship stuff. The lack of attention to this fic's other subplots is a bit frustrating and makes the pacing feel slow. Still, I've no doubt things will pick up in the next couple chapters.
Martin III chapter 33 . 6/23/2012
Oy, it's been too long since I've reviewed. My computer went down for over a month, and after that I felt I should prioritize reviewing ongoing fics, since the authors can adapt their writing to my criticisms if they want. Rest assured, my interest in this novel has not waned!

The opening to chapter 31 isn't the strongest; the bickering between Kusanagi and Sakura feels a bit forced, and in particular the rant opening with "You've got that right!" is rather awkward. However, the way Sakura uses the issue of Noa's fatherhood as a segue to Momiji's suspicions about Kusanagi's history is interesting.

Having Sakura able to see Zan Kazai is an intriguing touch, and showing this creates incredible suspense without at all spoiling the surprise of her showing up to save the day next chapter. You write her faith healer abilities very well.

Momiji and Kusanagi's drive makes a nice change of scene, and the definition of their relationship problems gives them a tad more excitement than they've had in the past few chapters.

A couple of sentences in these chapters are missing words: "...she shrugged it off, accepting Momiji's.", "Her green slid over the relieved look..."

The appearance of the fake Kome is very well crafted, creating an atmosphere of danger and mystery, even though I could tell right off that it wasn't really Kome. Building on that, Zan Kazai's subsequent attacks on Momiji have a profane and macabre bite that makes me share Kusanagi's anxiety and outrage.

And the battle with Zan Kazai gripped me right from the start and didn't let go. One of the many great points about the TV show was that most of the enemies had you wondering how the gang were going to beat them; I think you've captured a lot of that here.

A very engaging pair of chapters in general, with the action coming quick, hard, and intense. I like the pace you've set here and am looking forward to reading the next chapters.
Anon chapter 1 . 4/10/2012
I just wanted you to know, that I thought this was one of the best fanfics I have ever read, and that if you could have somehow been given the reins, you would have made the series complete, way better than what they did with Blue Seed Beyond. I would much rather have preferred to see this work made into the anime series than that.

Thanks so much for you talent, skill, ideas, and thoughts. You write flawlessly, and I can picture everything clearly, even hear the characters voices with how cannon you made it. Kudos
Martin III chapter 31 . 3/20/2012
Holy cow, I can't believe it's been over a month since I last reviewed. Anyway, great pair of chapters. The only significant complaint I have here is that the scene between Kaede and Susano-oh seems like little more than romantic cliche, and honestly feels out-of-place and unnecessary. Otherwise this is a pretty spotless continuation.

This even extends to your general depictions of Kaede and Susano-oh. You really tap into Kaede's motivations and internal conflicts, no easy task since she's so silent and withdrawn in the canon. Her little talk with Momiji, which I had feared would be redundant, definitely fleshed her out.

And wow, it sure has been a while since we've heard from Sakura. Her return is quite the tour de force, as you maintain her point-of-view with splendid attention to her mannerisms and perfect consistency with her character. There are so many great touches here, with Sakura's collection of keys from ex-boyfriends and your sympathetic rendering of her absentmindedness being particularly appreciated. (As an aside, there is an error in here: "It was a quarter to one, so where the heck was everybody?" From Sakura's perspective, it should be "IS everybody".) And the whole scenario with the hotplate is impeccably plotted comedy. Sakura's misremembering of the baby food instructions is hilariously believable as well; I myself couldn't remember for sure if what Sakura said was right.

Great ending, leaving me earnestly wondering what Sakura could have planned. To say nothing of the other developments, such as the Tengugaki mysteriously shifting their focus. After coming close to stalling over the last few chapters, this fic is really going places again.
Shamby13 chapter 47 . 3/6/2012
This is the first review i've given so please bear with me :)

I had to give feedback on this- it wasn't really a choice, this story was so wonderful and it was such a pleasure to read it, how could I not!

BlueSeed was my "first" anime and i always wanted more from the characters. I'd read a few fanfictions before and while i enjoyed them, they just seemed to be missing something. So thank you. Thank you for feeding my inner fangirl with your engaging and wonderful story. I loved that you brought Murakumo in- I always thought he had so much potential and was very happy with how you wrote him. I really enjoyed the characters you focused and loved how you wrote this story. Thank you for sharing your talent, and thank you for helping me have a little more closure with the wonderful characters!
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