Reviews for I Dare You |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I've never had so many different emotions at once while reading a fanfic. I'm literally crying right now. Awesome story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() loved the I dare you game this chapter lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() okay, i usually stay away from Inuyasha fanfics that aren't canon stories.. like stories that only have to do with the modern world.. but I'm giving this one a shot and I am loving it so far |
![]() ![]() ![]() Inuyasha is being such an asshole in this. Inuyasha has no right to ask Kagome to marry him after what he did to her. Kagome has every right to hate Inuyasha, and Kikyo is just a whore that everyone wishes would just die. (as the obvious hate for Kikyo is in the last sentence lol), I have no fondness for Kikyo, so have nothing nice to say about her. I feel sorry for Kagome she didn't deserve what Inuyasha did, no woman does. And since Kagome and Inuyasha were never married, and were never in a long enough relationship - and he never knew about Muteki until Sesshomaru and his father started looking into all the women he's been with, he has no right to Muteki unless they were married. And then divorced and decided on which days he gets to see Muteki, which if Kagome has her say that would be never. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story! Got lost a few times but great none the less. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The concept if the story is good but the delivery was slightly lacking. Although this is an AU the characters were very OC. The initial introduction of how Muteki came to be was "one night stand" but then it turns our they were dating. As this was clearly 21st, but there no explanation of why the characters were dating but not in physical relationship. Which if was explained could have added points to the story. Kikyo and Naraku characters were beyond OC and just didn't make sense. Also the introduction of new enemies felt rushed and with no substance or backstory. I normally ship and love SessRin characters. But the way Rin was portrayed made me dislike her. Also still don't get what Takahashis do. They are introduced as richest people in Japan. But no explanation what they do. When they work is introduced, it appears ti be some sort of magazine bussiness, but then they start talking about high end security development. Doesnt make sense. There were some inconsistencies, in one chapter a character is introduced as dying of lung cancer. But then he appears alive and well couple chapters later. There were a lot of grammatical errors too. Overall, as a story premise its good. But it could do with a rewrite to clarify and make the story flow better. |
![]() ![]() Loved this story! |
![]() ![]() Nice concept but you’re actual writing abilities left much to be desired for me personally. Still enjoyed it though! |
![]() ![]() ![]() After another reading at this fanfiction story there nothing mention about why Kagome is not staying with her son and living apartment with Sango. It doesn’t make sense why Kagome only comes on weekends to to take care of her son and not staying through out the weeks to take care of her son. It good that Kagome supporters doing child care how ever there studies that can make this irresponsible and bandit of not being around the child/children. Also I think the farther should of know about her being pregnant, stead of finding out years later. These are studies that I learned in child development. |
![]() ![]() Yes that is something every one did forget...kikyo... And what should have been kagomes first question ...what is with kikyo... and a contract that he can't have contact to her. |
![]() ![]() So she really did give in...hmm. ..not sure if this was not to fast... And kouga is right...sango should stop knocking miroku out cold each time he groped her...I mean she is his girlfriend. ..and if she does not like this ...maybe pinch him back hard where it hurt ...like belly neck eAR or sich. ...or elbow use... but over the head...can really make him so stupid that he possible will not know how to make babys...or can die..from brain damage.. |
![]() ![]() So he sheeted at her ...told her she was bad in sex...and she runs away...really ? No fist to his nose and kick to the bal.s...for both him and kikjo? Really ...and to tell her she was not so great with sex. ..I mean it needs two for tango... so he should have teached her...shown her how...should lead her. ...so it was his fault that she was not so good...and when kikjo is so good at gives some questions about her virtue...and how many males she was with to get so good... |
![]() ![]() And about this talk in school about mommy's and daddy's. ...what goes wrong with them...there are single parents (male or female) there are male male and female female parents too...or older grown up sibling or grandparent...and such. .. and why does this child need a father ..it is more like she needed a partner and father or so would not accept it all so fast ...after crying hate him so much before |
![]() ![]() I really don't get it. .. How can she say she hates him... and then accept him so fast. ... And to let a small child do as it wants to...and to stay with a man she does say she dislikes And really ...she straps the child in ...what about a childs car chair...they need this at this age to be protected ...and it takes hell and high water with some to take out and then put this child seat into new car... and to strap in child tales time too. |
![]() ![]() Wow did she give in fast...don't get it... And why was her sin so fixed on a father ..? When he did grow up the first three years of his life without one .but love of mother , grandmother grand grandfather and a cool uncle ...and other invle and aunts...there is no need or want for one as he dies not know one.. at least in this age ..teen he may ask for one...but as tiny child that is happy ... |