|Reviews for The Birthday Present|
| I. B chapter 85 . 3/11
Just read this story ( I wouldn't say in a sitting cause it's a long one, but still...) and it is great, I have yet to find out if there is a sequel, but wanted to leave a comment right away, otherwise I would've forgotten.
As I said it is great, you developed your characters into strong, convincing and lovable ones. You managed the varying point of view extraordinarily and just had a few little problems with consistency as is to be expected in a story this long, only noticeable when you read through it at once, but as I said, they were few and little, a couple of conversations and a scene repeated in different chapters.
You did an amazing story and I'm sure your betas did also an amazing job. Thank you for sharing.
| darkdranzer chapter 85 . 3/4
Wow this was really nice to read though i do wish there was more to the conclusion. I love how snape grew slowly out of his anger. Harry too
| Lunacom chapter 8 . 1/8
I feel like Harry may be a problem when the school yeat starts. I also like that Harry wasn't the main chracter in a fic. I sometimes feel tired that even when he isn't the main chracter all the protagonist can tink of is Harry. I also wish that JKR told us more about the people in the other houses. That the Slytherins aren't all evil and the Ravens and Puffs aren't the cast offs.
| English Major chapter 7 . 12/29/2013
'Smelt' is what one does to metals to remove impurities. 'Smelled' is the past tense of 'to smell'. They are not interchangeable.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 84 . 12/23/2013
YOu have really done a great job with this tale. you've thought everything through and added such clever bits of your own invention. Excellent story. But dark, very dark, which makes my reading it a read complement to you.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 85 . 12/23/2013
Thank you for sharing this long tale with us. Maybe it was a bit long, but I have enjoyed it as I rarely enjoy dark or sad tales. I do hope you will publish a sequel sometime. I really enjoyed seeing Slytherins as humans.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 61 . 12/12/2013
Petunia's POV was Very Interesting.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 52 . 12/11/2013
I wondered myself if anyone in the books would ever come sweeping in on a broom in battle, rather like a Valkyrie. I was pleased to see that the House Elves were active in the battle at the end of Book 7. No one ever paid them much notice. Thanks for sharing this dark tale.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 41 . 12/5/2013
Cthulu and Drooling Amateurs :-) Dark over all, though. Good to see Snape protecting his students. True to cannon. He even protected Harry, Ron, and Hermione in the books.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 40 . 12/5/2013
This is such a good story, such compelling characterizations, that even though I generally avoid violent and dark tales, I have to keep reading.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 38 . 12/5/2013
Harry imagining Petunia and Mrs. Black's portrait having it out. Delightful. Cleansing drops for Sybil's inner eye. Priceless!
"The Headmaster sometimes acted upon such impulses, usually to the dismay of every one else involved." That is so believable.
Goyle's ghost, I am glad he came to talk to his buddy. You are doing a good job fleshing out the characters.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 36 . 12/4/2013
I like Harry seeing himself and Snape as sacrificial victims. It is true. and you ended this chapter with such a sweet note, Harry realizing that even an ordinary moment can be happy with your good friends.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 32 . 11/21/2013
Poor Percy! You are doing a great job with him.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 25 . 11/20/2013
Dumbledore could ask the Ministry to send Percy (who must have done very well in Potions) to come to Hogwarts as a TA for Snape, who is known to be ill. And Percy could get there soonest, since he would need teaching classes from the other professors.
I am really enjoying your tale.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 22 . 11/20/2013
Very interesting and complicated tale you have here. I am enjoying it very much, in spite of its Dark parts. Thank you for sharing this.