|Reviews for Sunburn|
| ShotaroxPhillip chapter 10 . 9/3/2012
this is cool are you ever going to continue this story?
| mai chapter 10 . 11/13/2011
Please finish this wonderful story.
| Droiture LeReve chapter 10 . 4/7/2006
*blinkblink* Um, okay. Mokuba has some sort of evil illusion machine? Uh...yeah...*Blinkblink* I don't get it.
| catti-dono chapter 10 . 3/5/2006
Is this over? It seems incomplete? I wonder if there is more...Its a great story...catti
| DSampson94 chapter 11 . 11/13/2005
*smiles devilishly and goes to read the chapter again*
| Nefertari17 chapter 10 . 11/13/2005
oh...this is so sad, and i cant belive you just left it there!AH my compys about to break down! I'll make this quick then.
i really liked the way this was started out, it gave the whole chapter a more wholly outlook on the sitation before digressing into the personal world of all present. oh and i liked the last line of the first stanza, i do that a lot to - 'something was entirely wrong' - i really like doing that to my readers too, just give them a hollow feeling that the next bit is defifnitly not going to be good and just setting them up for a downfall just like you did with the whole defeat of both yugi and then yami. i also really liked the way you described the idea of the continuous beep but didnt ACTUALLY say what the beep was. i mean we all know it means someone's flatlining on a hospital heart monitor, but the fact that you didnt explain it is enouugh to make the reader feel anxiety all the same.
sorry if i'm rambling a bit, but i think your writing stlye is really getting better with each chapter you write.
hm, let's see what else is there...
oh yes, just enough time for one more thing - the desscripstions of whats happening to yugi were groteque! i commend you! i was so grossed out! especially the bit where his arm was broken! God, i swear i could actually hear that bit.
YIKES! my laptops really bugging me now, so i'm gonna have to go, see ya next time!
(PS. sorry for the short and late reveiw)
| Chocoholixx chapter 11 . 11/11/2005
Aw... finally they're together again. Poor Yuugi and Yami. Two souls meant to be together cruelly ripped apart. What the hell is Mokuba doing to them?
| katTheCharmer86 chapter 11 . 11/3/2005
What happen's next?
| Faerie Rose chapter 11 . 11/1/2005
aww. soo kute.
| tastes-like-ciel chapter 11 . 11/1/2005
Serena:Aw! - They're back together again! Yay! Good chapter. Please update soon.
| dragonlady222 chapter 11 . 10/31/2005
This is great. One couple is back together. What is with Mokuba, he's not usually this evil. Great job! Update soon, please.
| nuttx chapter 11 . 10/31/2005
That is so sweet and adorable! It really expresses their emotions, and shows their bond really well. Dying for an update!
| Angel Of Your Soul chapter 11 . 10/31/2005
aw thats so cute! puzzelshipping all the way! It dat the end of the fic? if not update asap!
| faorism chapter 11 . 10/31/2005
-0.0- i mean, that was so... heart wrenching. it was sweet but still oh so angsty. i mean, damn. i have ta rush (bro's coming home) but i really want ta say how great you are. toodles!
| Atemu Yugi Lover34 chapter 11 . 10/31/2005
AW! That was so awesome! I got scared at one point but I got over it during the kiss! lol...My heart like fluttered and ya...This chapter was really sweet! I can't wait for the next so update soon plz!