Reviews for Operation: TAIHINDA
SectorZFan chapter 2 . 12/15/2011
Plz write more! I love this story!
Omega-Red9 chapter 2 . 8/29/2005
A very interesting prospect. I look forward to reading more, but you will have to update first. As far as criticism, I would have to say that i the first chapter all of that talk about alien planets was a bit rushed. If I were you I would space that out a bit. It all seemed to be a little overwhelming. Also, if you are going to use some adult language, I would upgrade the rating to teen. Your grammar was acceptable, which is impressive for a fan fiction site. I am normally onslaughted my sentence fragments and comma splices, not that it's any big deal. I hope to see the story updated and evolved into something with a bit more substance. Remember, if you try to force your audience into your mind they will only resist and put down the book. You have to ease your reader into your world. I will leave you with this, if you have verisimilitude then your reader must suspend their disbelief.