Reviews for Break Free
wintergenisis chapter 1 . 11/25/2011
So yeah this review is totally not 6 years late :D


Thank you for putting up with my immaturity -
Apple Yumi 94 chapter 4 . 6/15/2011
too-much-romance chapter 3 . 7/16/2007
Wow, there's a quotation mistake at the beginning and...that's it. I like how you never made them say "I love you" in short intervals, because that'd be too mushy. Plus, the NaruHina part in there. I already know what that two-colored object from Hinata's attire is, but I won't say it for those fellow sneakers. Please continue!
too-much-romance chapter 2 . 7/16/2007
Sorry, but I always have to make a point. The second time he mentioned Byakugan in bold letters, there should be a "the" in front of it. Next, it's spelled 'chakra' not chakara. "While the two teenages fought" instead of "were fighting". It's 'kunai' not 'kunais'. Hm, again with the 'chakra'...and again...again with the 'kunai'. Somewhere it said "Neji did what! Did he apologize! Is Tenten okay!..." There should be exclamation AND question marks. And then after "Tenten will be all right." That should be 'alright'. In the second to the last paragraph there should be an ending quotation mark. Now for the comments. Just as a side note, Lee never EVER uses contractions, even in the subtitles and the English dub. Read his plea to Gai-sensei out loud and decide for yourself which should change and which should remain. There are only a few exceptions to his contraction rule. I like how Neji's thoughts were at the end and this is getting very interesting. Please continue! (Sorry this is so long)
too-much-romance chapter 1 . 7/16/2007
Seriously sorry, but I'm a grammar freak. Somewhere it said "I just overheard you say something about Neji-iisan." That should be "Neji-nii-san". Also somewhere there is says " 'I don't mind." " The apostrophe at the beginning should be a quotation mark. did it again at "Even I am unsure why Neji-iisan speaks that way." And after grammar blah, I go to side comments. 'The thought of older women scare me me...' Oh! That's good. Aren't you forgetting Ayame, the Ichiraku owner's daughter? But then you couldn't make up an excuse. Oh! What about Moegi? Or that Ami girl back in Ino and Sakura's memories? Ah, well, this is a nice start for a story, don't know what's going to happen next so I can't wait.
piixiiestiix chapter 4 . 7/15/2007

Liked the end
gaaraluver1 chapter 4 . 6/5/2007
OMG! THAT WAS A GREAT STORY! I've been looking for a good NejixTenTen fic that I could really get into and I really got into yours! Keep up the good work!
Crunch Berry Baroness chapter 4 . 4/18/2007
aw thats so cute great story!
Aireonna chapter 4 . 10/29/2006
This was cute... I liked it. Good job. I love NejixTenten!
gaarasminestayaway chapter 4 . 10/19/2006
no lemon? why-hy-hy!
richgirlfore chapter 4 . 7/14/2006
wow that was cool

one question, hav u done it, u seemed like u no alot about these things... well, good job
Cali Jayki chapter 4 . 4/6/2006
Natsyourlord chapter 3 . 3/21/2006
Hubliduh Hubliduh Hubliduh Hubliduh Hubliduh
Chidori vs Rasengan chapter 4 . 3/18/2006
that was good. cant wait for shikamrutemari fic
Devil of hope and dreams chapter 4 . 2/27/2006
not bad...

quite interesting...
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