I really like your story except the pairing of ginny with Harry, not good my friend!

All right so I was about to start reading this chapter and then I realized you left an author's note at the beginning, normally no big deal glance over him continue on. However I am worried about possible continuity errors. You couple chapters back claimed that Ash Republic was going to play with simple plan. On your author's note you said that you changed your mind, and that's no big issue as you put in the authors note you are the author. However my question is why didn't you just go back and change that in the chapter then? So that there was no continuity error and people could understand stuff because not everyone reads the author's notes. All that aside I am absolutely loving the story so far you've done a great job writing it. Can't wait to read the rest and answer some of my burning questions regarding the story lol

I really wish this to be continued

Wish this had continued

"Everyone in the Black Family is either a Death Eater, married to a Death Eater, or dead."
Yeah, and Andromeda Black and Nymphadora Tonks are just, you know, chopped liver
I get that Andromeda is disowned but still

What a degradation of a story. Initial chapters were fantastic. To some extent Dumbledore bashing but then it extended to rest of the order members and staff to the extent of foolishness and idiocy with no signs of repentance. No power shown in Harry for turning public opinions in his favour or using media for his own objectives and politics too. I mean the only power shown was of creatures kind for rest of the matters you effectively made Harry and his friends victims instead of heroes.

Since you showed this whore of a track for Veelas it's not hard to understand why they're not respected or they're not worth respecting. Or why they can never be wife material only slave or concubine material. For they can never wholly, solely and completely become only of one person for life. Their customs make them sophisticated whores.

Sick of you to write about Veela bonding like this making them a kind of whores. Sophisticated whores but any woman who has to perform intercourse with another woman being married is what it is, their customs make them whores. I was enjoying this story and especially happy that both Ginny and Hermione will be married to Harry but then you throw in this sick mind of a track, no white of a track. No wonder their called concubines and creatures.

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more please

This is getting kind of ridiculous still kinda good tho

ugh, ok the fic started fairly well, it was mostly good. But you just seemed to drag it out overly long and rather pointlessly and this final posted chapter tells me you'd lost your own path on it by then.

You should've had Harry and crew show up just as DD is killed by LV in the atrium, the battle goes as you had it otherwise, but Harry actually finishes LV off rather than pathetically allowing him to escape. Story over.

Oh and then Harry and his crew force all the sheep to get checked and find most of them spelled in some way to be such fucking sheep, especially for DD. The end.

Seriously, more of their problems came from them not just making DD vanish or letting him be killed by Voldemort, than Voldemort actually caused. If DD had been removed from the field, the sheep would've FLOCKED to Harry's side quick enough and he could've finished shit FAr easier.

uh, why in the FUCK would Harry give the Dursley's a huge fucking ruby? Transfigure a lump of shit or coal into a fake ruby that would wear off later, sure. But their 'trouble' got them a fucking house slave for a decade, plus a few summers.

So seriously, fuck them, all they deserve is jail time.

At some point, Harry really needs to get all the adult Order members checked for spells and tampering. I just cannot fathom some of those boneheads still so obediently following DD's orders like Tonks is, after all of the revelations of DD's actions.

he creamed inside him mothers mouth! Dudley and petunia. uhhhh that was a image I didn't need