Poor Snape. And if I remember correctly, Sirius was close to being expelled for the prank he pull on Snape daring him to go to the Shrieking Shack. So Dumbledore must have taken off more points than just ten. But great story. :)

I always thought that the life of Severus Snape was always manoeuvred in a way that it benefited the whole wizarding world but himself in the end.
People may hate him for his self-inflicted role in the war, but should also realize that it was always his destiny to walk a dark road, just like Harry was always meant to be the chosen one.

Even so, he is just as much responsible for Voldemorts Demise as Harry Potter, Dumbledore, Hermione, Ron and many others.
The only difference is that he'll never be recognized for it.
People call him a coward, and while that may be true in the beginning, he wasn't a coward in the end...just the opposite really.
He gave his life for a world that never gave a damn about him, for people who treated him like shit and his only drive was the love of a woman who never even loved him back.

If that isn't real courage I don't know what it is.

I like that this shows Snape's emotions after he killed Albus.

This is...so beautifully written it's unbeleivable. Excellent job with it:)

Wow.

You portrayed emotion beautifully here.

It made me cry.

Thanks, I think, for that.

But, yeah, really good.

This is really, exquisitely good fiction. I can tell you put a great deal of thought into not only the plot, but your selection of individual words. It's a spell-binding piece, of which you should be very proud.

Also, if you enjoy writing Harry Potter fan fiction, you might be interested in online roleplay games based on JK's books. I write at one called Sonora Academy. It's good fun and an excellent outlet for creativity. Plus our community is very friendly and I'm sure you'll find it enjoyable. If you have a chance, check out the link on my profile. We'd love to have a writer like yourself on board.

xx wingedthing xx

Wow...just...wow...

This was extremely powerful and thought-provoking. Even though it is now AU because it was written prior to DH you have still managed to capture the true essense of Snape's personality. Your writing style is clear and consice as well as quite poetic, yet the imagery does not detract from the plot. This is fantastic and flawless work. Well Done :)

- Frayed x

Lovely, lovely, lovely portrayal of our favorite Severus Snape Absolutely amazing!

Well, the Snape we know in the books is a coward. But I don't think we've seen the real Snape in the books, just a...shell, or something. Never mind, on to your story: Brilliant. I bet this happened after he killed Dumbledore. Very well done!

oh, it's so sad...beautiful too. i love how you portray severus' character. brownie points!

Very well written. I enjoyed it alot.

That was a very intense and well-written story.

I like your interpretation on how the Vow guided Snape's actions until it was fulfilled. Although I personally think he is still obliged to protect Draco, it would make sense if the Vow was fulfilled the moment Draco left Hogwarts as well. Maybe it's a coincidence, but the moment Draco left the grounds and disapparated could have been the very moment that Harry called Snape a coward and his face suddenly looked 'demented, inhuman and in pain'. Your story made me wonder if this was also an effect of the sudden disappearance of the magical bond, which could have led to the horrified realization of what exactly he had done which you described so well.

I like it! However, you have taken a different view to the murder than I did. I think that when Dumbledore said, "Please Severus" he was asking to be killed, too weak and poisoned to carry on. Also, that the unbreakable vow could not be broken. But, I like this little chapter. Do you think that Snape isn;t really on Dumbly's side then?

I've just re-read HBP for the first time since first reading it (I was so appalled by it) because I realised that I couldn't remember half the book, and now I have come to like it a little more. However, I wanted to read your stories again because I enjoyed them so much. I am about the re-read Ankh of Khepri and I hope I will not forget what happened in JKR's books which is what happened to me when I first read your series LOL! I had to read all of JKR's books again!

Anyway, I do hope that you return to Harry Potter one day soon. You are a fantastic writer and I enjoyed your 6th book more than I did JKR's. Whether you return to your own series of HP books or to JKR's, I await it with baited breath!

Thanks, Emily