|Reviews for Hidden in Plain Sight|
| PrettyWithAPistol chapter 13 . 3/14
The concept and development of this story was interesting to unravel. Your attention to detail with the Inu customs, nature of her blood markings, etc. was well-written and wholly intriguing.
However, aside from minor grammatical issues throughout each chapter, my main critique concerns the pacing and continual, convoluted scenarios that kept arising with little to no prior introduction.
With the most shocking example, since when did Kagome and Sesshoumaru actually start being sexually intimate (in the full sense) - they danced around the line, but there was no indication that it was ever crossed until, in the last two chapters, she is suddenly pregnant? I thought it was a misunderstanding, at first. No preamble - completely blindsided.
Also, the transitions between some scenes were so muddled and sudden that it catches the reader off guard and we're left thinking "oh, ok, so that just happened, I guess?" - the transitions between reality and illusions were just as confusing. I normally find no issue with following a story, being quite well-read, but I found myself with the feeling of having the ground pulled from under me on a few occasions. It's one thing for the reader to be surprised by a plot twist they didn't see coming - it's entirely another when they are left feeling dazed and confused because the provided details aren't adding up (to enough of a degree to make sense of the story).
Still, overall, this was an immensely intriguing read and I will favorite it. Sometimes it takes another reading to catch elements that were otherwise undetected the first time around. After all, the imagery and your creativity with embellishing the scenes that were explained and flowed naturally into the plot were spectacular. The interactions were both fascinating and entertaining to observe.
All the best with your endeavors- cheers! ~
| Guest chapter 13 . 1/4
This seems unfinished. Lots of mystery unsolved. Didn't even know Kagome and Sesshoumaru were that close to have a pup.
| insanity1911 chapter 13 . 12/9/2016
Marvellous. ..a really good story.
Thx for sharing.
Hope to find more on your profile
| Darknessdawns chapter 13 . 11/19/2015
This was an amazing story. I really enjoyed it and wish there was more of it. It had a bittersweet ending but over all it was wonderful. I found it well written and really liked how you brought in Kagome learning about the Inuyoukai. Though I do wish we would have heard what happened to Shippo. Perhaps one day you will write a sequel to this. I know I would love to read one.
| Undertheskys chapter 5 . 10/2/2015
How can Kohaku recognize her and Sesshomaru cant? Do she look like a Inuyoukai to him?
| Undertheskys chapter 3 . 10/2/2015
Wow dense much Sesshomaru
| Mirage chapter 13 . 8/26/2015
really like this Story and somewhat the end but ist so open, and ist sad that she did lose this Baby, and what is with Keigo...will he Show up again, i mean he cant be simple gone...poor guy...
will theere be a second part to this Story?
| Mirage chapter 5 . 8/26/2015
yeah...for this Moment i waited since he first did think she was part inuyoukai...
no he has plown up,...but he was right, what would think when somebody you protected and started to love did lie to you all the time, ok every time she wanted to say something he stoped her...but she is still more at fault...
but still i cant wait to see what the new extra abbilities of the sword are
| Mirage chapter 4 . 8/26/2015
oh my god...that is bad, sure he has won and so, but she still did not told him who she is,, is she really part youkai throught Inuyashas blood?
I mean he marked her, as mate?...so when she again turns at the new moon...what will he do when he finds out she is the miko and not a part blood inyoukai,...she really should say what she is bevor it becomes worse...
| BlackMagicRose7 chapter 13 . 7/17/2014
I loved this story and happy I could reread it!
| heartless16 chapter 13 . 3/21/2014
I really loved this story! I must admit though I was very confused at times with the backstory...
Nevertheless, keep up the good work!
| htaya2000 chapter 13 . 3/9/2014
At the end of this story I though I've cried and died.
| Eager chapter 12 . 2/11/2014
So many things left unsaid! How can you finish this in only one more chapter?
| Shocked chapter 11 . 2/10/2014
You're constantly surprising me!
| Nice chapter 10 . 2/10/2014
This chapter answered several questions I had. I found a lot of scenes very interesting here.