|Reviews for testing my sisters|
| golden-eyedwolf842 chapter 4 . 12/25/2005
The chapters are a little short, I must say. But I really like your stories. Keep up the good work! Great job! :P
| princessnyna93 chapter 1 . 11/24/2005
Way to go!Love it...
| Bureaucratic Bullet chapter 1 . 8/29/2005
Five-hundred and seventy-one words...
And every one of them pure gold...
“Oh my god!” Aria is being tensed. “What will going to do? Wataru is kidnapped by some bad guys and Mr. Aoki!” Hinako
“Oh my…” Marie is fainted. “Marie oh no! Get some glass of water! Quick!” Jiiya “Darn! I will slap that if I see him!” Sakuya is getting angry.
WELCOME TO ENGRISH RAND
FEER FREE TO FROW YOU GRAMMER BOOKS UP HTE TOILET.
The idea is actually interesting, and the dialouge isn't so bad, but you need to take a deep breath and start filing this into litiature, not just something you wrote in an opium den. The good points are there, but you're asking your readers to translate your story rather than read it, and not everybody is as patient as I am... or as good looking.
Two things. One, everytime somebody else starts talking start a new paragraph. Is that a rule? NO, but do it anyway. Two, read through it at least once before you put it out here. Especially as short as your stories are you don't have an excuse for some of the more blaring gramatical errors. Unles English is anything but your primary language in which case you can tell me to read it over for you and whatever. I'll probably come up with some, my mother is sick, story and you can tell me to F off if I every rear my ugly head again.
BTW F meaning flip.
| MizukiAkoi chapter 1 . 8/23/2005
hi i really lyk ur stories more more
| Alouete chapter 3 . 8/22/2005
since there are not much sister princess fanfic, this seems to be the only one with good plot. So please update soon?
P.S: I like Chikage the Best! (Sorry I needed that.)
| wchan39 chapter 1 . 7/18/2005
Interesting start...I just finished watching Sister Princess and I did kinda wonder about the origins of Wataru's 12 sisters...
I notice how you only accept signed reviews...which is kind of a bad idea since this can really limit the reviews you'll receive for your stories...anyway, please continue the fic.