|Reviews for The Children of Fortune|
| Blaze023 chapter 1 . 4/13/2008
Great fic! I liked how the way you could make a character seem real without making he or she talk and how when they talk they talk like in real life.
| Twin Sun Leader chapter 1 . 7/31/2005
Yes, war do that to people...
Your right, all the konoha ninja are kind of fucked up, but not that desespêrate I hope...
Anyway, good writing and great idea... You should had other characters, maybe.
| NanamiYatsumaki chapter 1 . 7/25/2005
that was beautiful...i loved it! great style..u made everying go into place - keep up the good work like this!
| alliedoll chapter 1 . 7/23/2005
good. very dark and gritty, but very true to character i believe.
| Kaki-kun chapter 1 . 7/23/2005
Very nice for a first fic! Transition between the different jounins could have been better, but your writing style was constant and efficient. .
Um, and by the way, since a lot of people don't seem to realize this, Asuma's father is the Third. They have the same goatee, the same smoking habit and same last name. Plus we already know the Third has a grandson. v_v; Which is why the Asuma/Kurenai pairings often make no sense.
Despite that, it was very nice. Not OOC, which often happens when most people first start writing.
Hope to see you write more soon then.