Reviews for Cold Deal
jojobevco chapter 1 . 12/11/2010
Good Story
LeonardoWillRebuildHisStudio chapter 1 . 12/12/2008
A great story. Very good.
NepenthesMiranda chapter 1 . 8/29/2005
I don't recall the particular TNG episode you've based your fan-fic on very well, but I have a feeling that the whole lesbian/pedophile/incest thing (Ick!) was something you made up. Why that was, I'm not sure, but in terms of your writing style: you might want to beef up your descriptions of places, action, and character movement/personalities-they were distractingly sparse at times and would seem to demand more attention. Also, you might consider having your grammar and sentence structure looked over again by another beta-tester; there were a lot of periods inserted that really chopped up your sentences and were honestly not necessary.