Reviews for Dawn OF Thunder: Chockys Dawn
bigstu chapter 8 . 11/29/2005
That was a good read so left me wanting more Guess ill have to go back and start re reading them all Great stuff PLEASE keep it up
rankokunalpha1 chapter 8 . 11/27/2005
wow got to love the airrigance and the operational security that the us uses! morons all of them! treat allie's like enemies like allies!
rankokunalpha1 chapter 6 . 9/23/2005
wow i loved the explanation to albertine and the others! cant wiat for more chapters!
grayangle chapter 4 . 8/8/2005
I do love all of the "Thunder" series and this one is no different. Keep up the good work.
rankokunalpha1 chapter 4 . 8/8/2005
oh amn i cant wait for the next couple chapters and the next emperor xander too!
rankokunalpha1 chapter 2 . 8/8/2005
you doubled up a cup of tea with two of tea of tea!using brackets for the problem. Brad and they are minor.

A therapist and maybe an intravenous drip of caffeine certainly seemed called for however. Hence, he tried to make a cup of tea [of tea], just waiting for the kettle to blow up on him and join the long list of things that had gone wrong already today. It didn't, but the tension even had his cat crawling into hiding and that was enough, he needed to calm down.
rankokunalpha1 chapter 1 . 8/8/2005
minor correction you missed the word use in this sentence.

The Great Enemy, they know a few of the tricks of the mind too, but they just [use] them to subjugate, dominate, control and spread their evil across the worlds of space. Worse, this world shows all the signs that they have been active here in the past, their pyramids, the prisons of their fallen, their technology; all of it lines this world, marking it with their heresy. other than that no other problems.