|Reviews for Hina One Half|
| UVlite chapter 3 . 12/5/2009
I hope this one gets continued if time and real life permit it. It seems slightly more thought out than some of the other stories of yours I have read but also more rushed.
| J.Spicer chapter 3 . 10/3/2009
Now this is what I call a pretty interesting story, with an amazingly entertaining plot. Have you ever thought about updating this any time in the near or distant future?
| Anubis of The Highway Thieves chapter 3 . 8/10/2009
This is funny.
| count-zechs00 chapter 3 . 6/26/2009
I hope that someday you decide to continue this story, I realy enjoy it.
| Kumoatsu chapter 3 . 6/22/2009
Wow, I really like this story, please continue to update!
| Dragonhulk chapter 3 . 5/24/2009
I love these stories where the main character is dropped into a fictional world that he or she knows. It's fun to see the characters from the world caught flat footed, and even better when the main character changes things so much that he/she can no longer predict what will happen next.
Know it probably won't happen considering how long this has gathered dust, but I hope you will add more to this story in the future.
| chm01 chapter 3 . 11/26/2008
THIS IS SOO GOOD!
| AngelicWrath chapter 3 . 9/14/2008
love the story i cant wait to see what else happens in the story keep up the good work update soon:)
| Celestial Indigo chapter 3 . 8/6/2008
Nice story thus far. I know that you haven't updated it in over 2 years, but I still have some suggestions if you decide to continue it.
1.) Since 'Granny' is still alive and the owner of the Hinata-sou, not to mention the GrandMaster of the Urashima style of Martial arts, she can effectively play a more interactive role in the story. Say, like...AH! Her husband was Happosai, who for some reason got 'warped' away to another dimension. And she shares his type of perversion...except towards men. (shudder)
2.) In the Anime, his parents were bakers. In the Manga, the were too, but not shown. It seems like you were trying to start basing it off the Manga, but it became moreso off the Anime. What happened? In the Manga, Shinobu came towards the beginning of Junior High. Same somewhat with Makoto, except it was High School. Naru and Mitsune may have been there the longest, but there is some discrepencies in their ages. Since Kitsune drinks, it is asummed that she's 20, thus would have been a Senior while Naru was a Sophmore(sp?), 3 years ago.
3.) Engagements to this RanLove-xover, Granny decided that Ranma needed to be Very Manly, so the creed of the school is that IF one school challenges him for their school and loose, their daughter (if any) would be engaged to marry him. If no daughter was alive, the said challenging families would lose their property. This could be why the Hotel was named Hinata instead of Urashima-sou. Ah, the love of the Ranma-factor.
4.) On one of the return trips from hot springs all over the world, Grandma Hinata decided to stop by Jusenkyo, and get some 'water' for her wayward grandson. I'll let you decide how that plays out.
5.) With Naru, she could simply be a promise that Haruka made with their parents too, thus strengthening the children's promises.
6.) With an educated Ranma, rivals that pretend to be friends, and a whole country to travel, why not do this. A small scene from A. You, or Negima would not hurt at all since it's from the Akamatsu-verse, ne?
I hope this helps in continuing to write this fic. Good luck and lookin' forward to your next chapter.
| Dark omega z chapter 3 . 7/14/2008
great chapter...but did you dicontinue this?...please don't.
| Nightgazer333 chapter 3 . 6/4/2008
UPDATE this please! It's so GOOD! A very nice fic you've written here!
| tatewaki2000 chapter 3 . 5/20/2008
Love the Ranma x-over. :)
| inevitable chapter 3 . 5/8/2008
This is interesting. Ranma in Keitaro's place. His conceptions to the situation is different. Plus he has skills to defend himself. Hope you update soon.
| Kapola Nuva chapter 3 . 4/29/2008
I hope you continue writing this, i enjoyed what you have written so far
| RLDX chapter 3 . 4/21/2008