|Reviews for Survivors|
| Vulnus-sanare chapter 10 . 11/16
I loved this fanfiction thank you for sharing your incredible gift of writing with us. Severus can be a difficult man, but when he makes a right choice, it makes all the difference in the world.
| Guest chapter 9 . 7/2
Appreciate no smut. It feels like intruding on sth very private plus is difficult to write well.
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/2
Always appreciate a Jane Eyre reference! My paperback looks similar, even though English is not even my first language. I agree with Hermione that Jane Eyre is much more than a Romance novel :)
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/2
"You are owed something." Good for Hermione finding the Slytherin tone of persuasion.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/2
"One good thing about being free is that Winky can do what is good for Master, not just what she is told." :D Very progressive, Hermione will be glad to hear :D!
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/2
"Not needing clothes here" - haha! Might say that the next time salesmen or "soul catchers" turn up on the doorstep...thinking about it, I better not :-D
| mjato chapter 10 . 3/10
Again, my apologies for a long winded comment. I was trying my best to be detailed in my critique to be sure it's not dismissive or uncaring of the hard work Dyce undoubtedly put into the story.
| mjato chapter 10 . 3/10
A nice slow-burn story that had a turn at the last 2 chapters. 80% of the fic were most fabulous and then it crashed into an unsatisfying let down.
Even ignoring how it makes little sense that the dark mark could be removed simply by being cut off (even without canon info disproving that it simply wouldn't serve its purpose of binding people to voldypants if it was so simple), the moment after that final fight started the characters changed way too drastically and everything got rushed and weird. Yes, there is something to be said for how it can feel so utterly easy after both sides admitted love and that was pointed out, yet it felt unauthentic and lacked nuance and depth and was way too fast and plain. What started as a beautiful emotional scene turned into cardboard. No addressing of their fears or misgivings, no questions about Ron, nada. Just a few repeated 'i love you' and full disappearance of the emotional complexities that have been build up previously. A mention of further not shown 'private conversations' taking place only made it worse. This resolution scene definitely needed a lot more work and space to pace and breathe, to show the heroes' hearts and the triumph of love over fears.
I don't care that there were no sex scenes and completely respect the author avoiding smut. Not a problem at all. Yet after skipping true emotional resolutions, the writer still added the off-page sex and a post-sex scene crudely mentioning how loud Hermione was while they were intimate. Was that an attempt at a substitution? The very fact of them having sex was terribly at odds with how the sex was presented to be treated by wizards! I find it very hard to believe that even if our heroes didn't subscribe to the prudish wizarding attitudes they would be so incredibly cavalier about it and not worried about Hermione's reputation getting completely smashed (which, again, was clearly established would happened) if it ever came to be known. And since the intimacy happened off the page, the problems with this and the issues both characters had with being touched, or the implied sexual assault(s) Hermione went through which would've affected things drastically, were also swept under the rug and not addressed. It made no sense and felt like the very fact of the sex being added was a strange compromise to satisfy the readers, while contradicting the characterisations and the fic's lore.
Mentioning characters having sex and mentioning them having deep intimate conversations is not the same as actually showing either of those and showing how they are overcoming their issues and opening fully to love after said feeling got out in the open.
This utterly bizarre mix of shorting the emotional details at the single most important point of the story while throwing in off-page sex was so at odds with the rest of the story that it felt like these last pages were written by a different person who didn't bother checking the prior 7.5 chapters. In fact, I had to check I wasn't accidentally reading a different story altogether.
The author is clearly a talented writer and the first 7 chapters were most excellent. There was good nuance to the characters and a logical pace to things. Those chapters were of a solid quality and are a credit to the writer. I'm saddened that the most critical part of any show burn was so bizarre, rushed, and uneven. An unsatisfying ending that unfortunately damaged the story quite critically. Even the sugary epilogue could not salvage it for me, and typically I'm all pro such a wrap.
I also want to note how I got startled by the sudden mention of Hermione's parents coming to the couple's off-page wedding. At that point I remembered they were briefly mentioned as alive early on, and that brought into question why they were not present in the story at all? It was set up that Hermione barely left Severus alone for a year and was quite alone and impoverished, but if her parents were still in her life enough to come to a wedding, why were they not mentioned further? Why didn't they help her financially? Or emotionally? Why didn't they care she lived with an older man nursing him to back to life with no help? Did they have a fight? Was she avoiding them? A definite plot hole, sadly.
In closing, 7.5 chapters of good writing and solid build up, followed by a contradictory plot-hole ridden crash of dissatisfaction. I'm certain the writer had way more up their sleeve and look forward to reading other stories they've shared, but i would avoid this one unless one is better at handling sudden switches in depth than I am. I admit I am being rather harsh and long winded, but in my defence that is only because I believe that the writer is talented and this ending left me quite disheartened and hollow. I hope they can forgive me and see it for the genuine surprise that this was.
Thank you still for sharing this story! I hope you continue to write and polish your skill.
| mjato chapter 9 . 3/10
So funny that they are breaking dishes and throwing them away instead of repairing them. I think someone forgot about magic.
| mjato chapter 7 . 3/10
"He'd deceived Voldemort, how difficult could it be to deceive himself?"
That's a brilliant line!
The story so far is simply fantastic.
| gymnopedie chapter 10 . 2/1
This was so lovely, thank you. Very successful in working in so many clichés while at the fans time the emotional journey and developing relationship between our two heroes rings true. Skill indeed!
| Sammypenny chapter 10 . 12/30/2022
Great writing. Captivating story!
| Melixa70 chapter 10 . 12/1/2022
| WiseFly chapter 10 . 10/23/2022
| Mothboss chapter 9 . 9/27/2022
I appreciate the lack of sex. Also, Severus giggling is a better gift to me as a snamione shipper than any stupid lemon.
Honestly I get kinda grossed out by the constant explicit content. It’s no better than written porn, and just as addictive and damaging.