(directly glares at Weirdman): Ranma's life would've been any better off without the likes of his (Ranma's) undeserved curse.

Sorry but the panda doesn't fit in at all. He wouldn't

follow Ranma to school because there is no need to keep

him from changing and it's doubtful he would interfere

in a challenge. Ranma was done with it anyway and there

was no need to avoid the rain.

Ranma "Must you keep interrupting me! Now where was I? That's the third..."

*chuckle* That was a great line. Not being forced to be female Ranma

should be even more ego driven. This fits perfectly.

I like the scene with Kuno saying Ranma was a man

of honor. It fits in with his own ego very well.

The only reason they went to the Tendo's house

before returning home was the curse so you really

should change that.

The outline you have for the girls hating him

doesn't make much sense.

Kasumi "I don't like Ranma... Because...Because of what he may do to Akane."

*Ranma if you h...*

Sorry but that bit makes no sense.

Spun me around and threw me toward the ground. Of course I was undaunted by this, but Ranma stop the match to look for me. Didn't know I was a panda. So...

Didn't the guide tell him? Not to mention the

gi and glasses were a dead giveaway.

There are serveral problems with your planned reasons for the main girls to all hate Ranma.

Shampo: she could think that the Guide told Ranma that he recieved the Kiss of Death rather than Marriage which throws a monkey wrench in the explination (Genma taking Ranma away as he did before Ryoga showed up on the fourth day is another out)

Kodachi: in the magna she like him because he saved her when her attacks backfired. Has nothing to do with Ranma changing into a girl.

Ukyou: When he says she is cute her obsession changes from hurting him and his father to marrying Ranma. Again this has nothing to do with him chaning into a girl.

Only Akane behavior to Ranma would change due to his not changing into a girl if everything else was kept the same. This is one of the reasond I don't like stories like this; like Marvel's old What If... series where only one event is changed and yet all these unrelated changes also occur so one never really sees the porported timeline.

I'm afraid I don't agree with your version of the facts, in the manga Ranma did not hesitate to fight with Shampoo so he does not hesitate to fight with girls (even if he does not like it).

The only reason he does not hit Akane is because she treated him in a friendly way when he first arrived if you take that out of the picture Akane has no chance at being treated otherwise than the other girls by Ranma and as such could not hit him with her mallet or any other way.

Beside, don't you think if Ranma had benn able to evade his father at Jusenkyo he would have been able to evade that mallet in chapter 1.

Otherwise the story is well written, I just don't agree with the way you set it up, more would be needed to set a change in you direction apart from the fact that Ranma stays male.

nice start. I like the love triangle with Nabiki, and you seem to have Akane's personality down fairly well. Love to see more

Whoa, it was short but it was good. Keep it up, loved to read the oncoming parts that have yet to be posted. Til then, keep up the good work.

Good idea but it could have been written a little bit better and perhaps not in script form. Still this is quite entertaining and it's obvious you have some good ideas. 7/10

It's a good start. My only problem with it is that Kasumi and Nabiki are almost totally out of character. Kasumi trying to match Ranma and Akane up because she thinks Ranma will be good for Akane, I can understand, but not while, as you have her state to Nabiki, she is afraid of what Ranma will do to Akane. Not to mention that the generally pleasant and upbeat Kasumi is unlikely to to have any ill thoughts of Ranma at this point, even if you use the Kasumi varient that hates Ranma because of his curse (a mark of dishonor in a very traditional sense as I understand it). Similarly, you indicate at one point that Nabiki is ready to be engaged to Ranma right now, just on the basis that Akane hadn't yet charmed the socks off him, which is very much in keeping with cannon, but the act of giving Ranma up to Akane is very out of character for Nabiki, especially when Akane so obviously dislikes Ranma. (The main reason she returned Ranma after the time she was engaged to him being that Akane was obviously in love with him.) It's a selfless act from a mercinary who sells photos of Akane to the boys of Furinkan. Sure, Nabiki might think Akane is a spoiled brat, but that doesn't mean she'd willingly give up something she wants to correct that. I understand that you still want Ranma and Akane to be engaged, but Kasumi and Nabiki aren't the ones to do it here. The easiest and most beleivable way is that Genma and Soun pick Akane for Ranma when he hesitates to pick one himself and before Nabiki can gather up the courage to claim him.

OK, so Akane is the Bride Apparent, but is a spoiled brat with a temper. Big sisters push her on Ranma because he is the only one able to cope. Sounds a bit like the story "Proper Punishment" by ...fill in here...

I would like to see this continued. It's a variation that hasn't been tried before, that I am aware of.

Without meaning to antagonize, I think your ideas would come across a lot smoother and clearer if you engaged a proofreader. There are plenty of grammar, vocabulary, and punctuation errors throughout-and that just gets in the way of what you want to say.