helpful hints.

Break the lines between normal words and Characters talking. and also between characters as well. it is hard to read. see if you can tell the difference.

#1 it was a sunny day, Ranma and Akane were walking to the marketplace. when Ranma got splash. "I realy hate this cusre!" Ranma yelled. "Ranma no baka!" akane yelled. "Why does this always happen to me?" Ranma asked.

#2 It was a sunny day, Ranma and Akane were walking to the marketplace. when Ranma got splash.

"I realy hate this cusre!" Ranma yelled.

"Ranma no baka!" Akane yelled.

"Why does this always happen to me? Ranma asked.

doesn't number two flow a lot better then number one. I like these stories but this writing is bad takes away 95% of the story. I made that mistake but once there were breaks where it was needed I got More hits then before.

Really an interesting story, I hope that you come back to complete it at some point.

please make more chapters

Just a little guess of my own, but was it Daisuke?

From Ranma's perspective at the party, we hear "God, I'm so sorry Ranma" just before they penetrate her, so we know it's someone who knows him/her, as well as the fact that he keeps calling Ranma a her when he's talking with Hiroshi later, and his lack of care over her disappearance could be a cover for relief that it looks like he/she won't be coming back.

Just my thoughts, I'd love to know if I'm right or wrong, give me an answer if you would please.

This story has torn at me every time I've started reading it. I always say I judge art by the level of emotion it stirs in me, and by that measurement, this story is a masterpiece beyond most I have ever experienced. I cry, I rage, I hurt and for the first time, being able to read chapters that were previously unavailable, I hope. I will wait years more if I must, for the rest of it, for the resolution, for what closure can be found.

I hope that Ranma finds out who raped him, and can confront him for some closure of his own. It's such a tenuous thing, closure, yet so important.

I have so many things to say about this story but most of them kinda get all mixed up when I try, so I'll finish with this: this story needs to be finished, whether it takes days or years. In the meantime I will wait.

Is there any hope of completion?

Finally! I say, I thought he/she was gonna let people walk over 'im all day... I've never really understood why people always insist on having Ranma take everyone's shit without ever having a temper tantrum of his/her own. The guy has an ego the size of the moon, no way in hell would he/she automatically assume that yes, it's his/her fault, I'm scum and worthless and so on.

URGH! It's getting pretty cliche...

But finally, FINALLY, someone wrote something where he actually DOES SOMETHING except just take it like a good little loser.

And how Nabiki actually dares to screw around with him is surprising... She's gotta know that a person will only take so much before they snap and lash out, and a guy who can shatter granite with his bare hands is not someone you want to get angry.

Good work!

Well written.

I would love to see this continued if you're so willing.

what the hell ! where is the next update T_T !

This story is so good and sad ! we want to know what happen ! (i really think the anime/manga Ranma would abort !)

well, see you soon I hope !

I liked that scene, in fact I really like this entire story as a whole and I'm sorry to see its likely dead and burried...the only thing I didn't like...more that I rather expected was when ranma ran to his mother, I thought he would have come clean, that his sense of weakness and loss of honor would have sought redemption on the tip of his mother's blade, that he would have weighed the love of a parent against an honorable death and saw the situation as more or less a win win siutation. Other than that its been truely an enjoyable read.

...Was that a Hitchhiker's Guide to the Universe Reference?

Anyway all I can say is this is truely a masterpiece, no work I have ever read, perfessionally or not, has ever captured the casual cruelty of the human perspective, nor the uncertainty born from a life of abuse. Too be honest I had to walk away from this, it was physically painful to read on, I would find myself clicking back, reading a paragraph and then going to listen to a song, because it was that emotionally trying to read.

Trapped by social pressures and expectations I think we can all relate to ramna at some level, especially those individuals who are already having issues with their own sexuality.

I have never in my life read a single story infused with such an overwhelming level of emotion, if you have ever written professionally, or one day plan to, please tell me, because I would dearly like to read anything else you have written.

Has a nice Jean Rhys feel to it.

I finally found this story again. I remembered bits and pieces of it but could never remember the title nor the author. However, I remember how the first few chapters held me, riveted, with a sense of, well, majestic foreboding if you will. Then I had, I HAD to go to sleep and I forgot to bookmark it.

Your story poses more questions that it answers. Yes, abortion is a major decision. Yes, Ranma is quite unprepared to be a mother and raise a child. Yes, Akane is... Akane.

In ancient Japan, abortions were one of those unspoken common things. A famine, too many children too close together, some fun time with someone not the husband and, oops, he's returning home after a 2-year absence and...

So, yeah.

MY question is are you ever going to finish this?

Suspense. Is. Killing. Me!

It took me forever to read through the first six chapters and now there's only the _beginning_ of the last chapter? I _need_ to know how it ends!

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Wow, after reading Apron Strings I quickly jumped to this story. You've done just as wonderful a job with this one so far as you did with the other one. That is...emotional depth. Ah, such a blessed thing to find for a change :)

The guilt Ranma felt is so misplaced. Akane tortured Ranma physically HOW many times and then when he finally blocks her from doing it again he's treated like this, for fighting back? Hurting someone weaker than you is horrible, yes... but not when that person has chosen to hurt you. Still, that Ranma's breaking away a bit at the end of this chapter is satisfying. Also, Akane never joined in that much with the others, which is in her favor.

~ev