|Reviews for Part the First|
| sunneedee chapter 8 . 8/15/2013
Not keen on the 1st person POV
| Sirces Castle chapter 9 . 3/30/2013
the switches in pov and to first person are jarring. this started out rather nicely but now its throwing me off and im not sure i like this new method of transition at all
| ClaMiAl chapter 13 . 10/3/2012
I very much enjoyed reading this story. I'm actually a bit unsure whether I've read it before, but it had enough scenes that seemed unfamiliar to me that I think I haven't. Either way. I liked the characters, or rather, how you described them, how they acted and thought. Sometimes the italics and capitals along with the dashes got a bit much; I would have preferred more descriptives (i.e., He shouted, "Blah!" instead of, "BLAH!"). On the other hand the dashes did bring across the confusion, the mid-sentence stutters, hesitations, etc. So I can't really complain.
What I did find a bit weird was that you switched between third and first person. The story was always written from a certain perspective, sometimes Snape's, sometimes Harry's, or Remus' or Ginny's. But, yeah, it went back and forth between "he/she" and "I". Also, the tenses changed. I didn't actually notice it as it happened, but now I see that at the end of Chapter 13 you used past tense and I remember reading something in present tense at some point. That present tense part was in the first person perspective, though, so perhaps that has something to do with it? Either way, it's strange, and I don't quite understand why you did that. I did like, though, that you switched POVs. While Harry is my favourite character, seeing the situation (and him) through another character's eyes is pretty cool. Especially when someone is good as giving each character a different 'voice'. And you're definitely good at that.
So, anyway. I'm gonna go and start reading the sequel now. Can't wait to see how the story continues. Cheers!
| onaleia chapter 3 . 6/18/2008
Regarding characterization: I really enjoyed books 1-4, but hated book 5 just because Harry was so determined to be miserable. You've certainly captured that well here. Good job on that.
| FireChildSlytherin5 chapter 13 . 12/20/2007
Oh love the fic. I know I read it be4. idk if I reviewed once or not. :)
| MIEDE chapter 6 . 3/13/2007
I love how your Harry stands up to whatever. Hermione can be SUCH an idiot when it comes to being nosy.
| MIEDE chapter 4 . 3/13/2007
Wow. I like it. I'm only on the fourth chapter, but after posting my own story I can now appriciate reviewers, so I just had to tell you how much I like the direction you are going. Not too much drama too fast, but not too slow and awkward.
| IvyIcy chapter 6 . 8/18/2006
"Sorry, I’m really enjoying being mean to poor old Harry right now – he just seems to have everything happen to him, doesn’t he? At least, when I’m mean to him I make sure he can stand up to his circumstances somewhat, unlike many Abused!Harry or Generally-Suffering!Harry fics, where his eyes just shine/glow with determination/nobility/hurt/innocence, and he doesn’t do jack st to help his situation but lies down and takes the beating/wrongful imprisonment (which reminds me – I’d like to try my hand at one of those…). No, readers – my Harry is strong, and if I arrange for him to die a horrible death, he’ll go, albeit kicking, screaming and cursing. Spectacularly."
I admire your philosophy. I hate the whole Abused!harry deal, it frustrates me. Why would I want a weak, puny character? No. Your 'let him suffer, but let him suffer kicking" strategy is entirely more appealing. I don't want to seem overly sadistic, but I adore seeing the characters have difficulties/angst of the sort in your fic.
| IvyIcy chapter 5 . 8/18/2006
oh my gosh.
the farce. that was wonderful.
| IvyIcy chapter 3 . 8/18/2006
That was very enjoyable to read, and the characterisation was spot on. The way you've done occlumency is pretty good too.
| IvyIcy chapter 2 . 8/18/2006
Yay excellent. Score two: you also got the tonks/lupin deal correct.
And brilliant at making harry sound highly reminiscent of snape, even before lupin pointed it out.
| anon chapter 1 . 8/18/2006
I'm impressed. (though i suppose they were predictable) you got some facts exactly the same as the start of book 6.
And the throttling of kreacher was so fun to read.
| The Wigmonsters chapter 13 . 6/4/2006
*smiles grimly at chapter title* Of course there isn't a resolution. If there's to be a sequal, there'll never BE a resolution 'til the last chapter of the last story.
| The Wigmonsters chapter 10 . 6/4/2006
Poor Hippogriffs haven't been very happy lately, have they? We should go call Hagrid. He can cheer them up!
| The Wigmonsters chapter 8 . 6/4/2006
My god. I laughed my ass off at this chapter title the moment I saw it. :)
You know, this story reminds me oddly of both Blind Faith(its sequal, too) by xyvortex and... well, the story that I'm thinking of started before HBP, then the author made a new, HBP-compliant one. One is called Time to Spare, and the other is called Time for Me. The one with sixteen chapters is the HBP one.
You know what the funny thing is about this story reminding me of those two?
The plots are NOTHING alike.
One's a slightly-disabled-Harry story, and the other's a time travel story. It's not the plot that holds the familiararity, it's the way it's written.
By the way, this is a compliment. Both stories are wonderfully mind-boggling, and so is this one.
I tip my hat to you, or I would if I were wearing it.