Reviews for Part the First
SafirePhoenix chapter 13 . 3/26/2006
SafirePhoenix chapter 12 . 3/26/2006
okay, now i'm getting annoyed. are you going to kill off everyone in this story?
SafirePhoenix chapter 11 . 3/26/2006
oh, harry...

i feel so bad for him... but what he did to veron, running off on the shape he was... fills me with a sense of pride. that's our harry... always around to save the day and piss off old voldy. you go harry!
SafirePhoenix chapter 10 . 3/26/2006
OMG! must keep reading...
SafirePhoenix chapter 9 . 3/26/2006
okay, so veron was a death eater instead of a pedophile. i was still close! they're practically the same thing!
SafirePhoenix chapter 8 . 3/26/2006
oh boy...

has harry gone mad yet? i'm just waiting for him to either take a dive off his broom, or choke dumbledore with his own lemon drops, boil snape in one of his potions, and beat hermione to death with hogwarts a history. really the homocidal tendencies seem to be there, now all you need is the massive slaughter.
SafirePhoenix chapter 7 . 3/26/2006
that has got to be the most... unique... father/son relationship
SafirePhoenix chapter 6 . 3/26/2006
oops! i forgot to review! sorry, i was too busy growling at the unfairness that is harry's life. gr...
SafirePhoenix chapter 5 . 3/26/2006
harry's friends are morons. find new ones! really, how would you feel if your friends assumed you were gay? that was just... nothing against gays or anything... but i really want to throttle those gryffindor idiots right now.
SafirePhoenix chapter 4 . 3/26/2006
interesting... is the dada teacher a pedophile?
SafirePhoenix chapter 3 . 3/26/2006
another review! i love your story!
SafirePhoenix chapter 2 . 3/26/2006
look, another satisfied review! i'm trying to help your story catch up. don't worry, we'll have you at 100 in no time!
SafirePhoenix chapter 1 . 3/26/2006
you know, for a story this interesting, i'm appauled by the lack of reviews. so here you go! question: is this a severitus challenge? that's what it seemed like from the summaries...
E.M. Snape chapter 13 . 3/9/2006
Wow, just found your trilogy. I really love the characterization, and the plot's exciting. Terrific writing. I'm going on to read the sequels!
Vanna chapter 13 . 1/28/2006
ok, I've been trying to write this review and somehow it never seems to come out right. The good things first.

Someone recommended this story to me and I got hooked from the first paragraph. Very well-written and excellent characterization. You managed to get all of the characters just right. The story flowed well and there was a good balance between dialog and narration.

But (you knew this was coming, didn't you? :)) then you started switching between first and third person at random times. This interrupted the flow of the story and made the reader spend time trying to figure out _who_ it was that was talking, instead of just following the plot. And then we got to the last two chapters which I didn't manage to read because they were too messy.

Please don't take this as a flame; it's not meant to be. You have a great story, but you really should decide whether you want to make it either _all_ third person, or strictly first person, and, if the latter, stick to one person's point of view; or at least don't switch within the same chapter.

I'll try to read the sequel now; hopefully the first chapter will explain what just happened in this one :)

Anyway, like I said, this is a really good story and I hope that you will consider what I and a few other reviewers have suggested about the first/third person issue, since, in my opinion, fixing this would make it perfect.
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