|Reviews for One Day Remains|
| harknessfan chapter 7 . 9/14/2012
Thank you for posting this glimpse into young Obi-Wan's life. Is it any doubt that he grew up to be such a great man when he was forged in the fires of an angry, abusive father and a mother too afraid to intervene? I'm so glad you shared this story with everyone! Your story was lots of fun to read, and I love the foreshadowing near the end with Qui-Gon. I know this is an earlier story for you and I apologize again for just now finding it. We recently introduced our son to Star Wars (though we had to skip Revenge of the Sith, he is only six years old and that one is a bit dark, though my favorite) so my Obi-Wan crush is renewed. :) Thanks again for posting such a great story to read.
Oh, and I can't believe I forgot to mention your chapter titles! They're wonderful - when I write, I usually just put in, "Chapter x" and if I'm lucky, I go back in and put in titles. I have to ask, Crimson Regret was my favorite title - are you a fan of Evanescence? That reminded me of the song, Tourniquet. All of the chapters had very fitting titles, many could be song titles as well for popular songs. I thought they went well with your story chapters. :)
| harknessfan chapter 6 . 9/14/2012
Bravo! Bittersweet for Obi-Wan here - leaving his best friend, but also leaving the abusive life he's lived so far. Again the pacing was great. I also like how you seem to capture their voices well, your word choices show that you care for keeping the characters true to themselves. Thank you so much again for posting. I can't wait to read the end, so I'm heading there now! :)
| harknessfan chapter 5 . 9/14/2012
I'm glad that you warned me about the abrupt ending. But I still must find out what happens to Laini... reading on...
| harknessfan chapter 4 . 9/14/2012
Yay! I'd forgotten what Tahl looked like, so it was nice the way you described her, then went back to describe Obi-Wan's dream. Hmm, we all know who that little green guy is... this is great again! Is it wrong that I want something bad to happen to his parents so he is free to join the Jedi (as, of course, we know he does eventually but I want it to be soon!)? If it is, I am guilty. Reading on...
| harknessfan chapter 3 . 9/14/2012
Terrific again! No distraction found from awkward phrasing or grammatical/spelling errors. Your writing has a great pace - reminds me of Dean Koontz, it keeps the action going and makes it very difficult to stop reading. It's hard to make myself take time to type a quick note as I have such an impulse to finish reading! This is why I always wait to read until the story is completed! Thanks so much for posting! Even though you're writing him very young, it's easy to imagine these traits being part of Obi-Wan from the start! Reading on...
| harknessfan chapter 2 . 9/14/2012
Awesome again! Please re-apply the glowing praise from my previous review. Can't write more, have to find out what happens! I know you understand. :)
| harknessfan chapter 1 . 9/14/2012
I know this is an older story, but I recently discovered it, so I hope you don't mind. I enjoyed your story very much. Of course, I rather like the topic and will read just about anything about Obi-Wan - except for slash, I feel the same way you do about that... I have to say, I am impressed with your correct grammar and punctuation use throughout. It is rare that I read a piece that one error or another does not distract me while I am reading. Your piece had no such distractions. This is a very under-rated matter of enjoyment for me, so I wanted to share it with you. I also really like the idea of this story so far. I am looking forward to reading the rest. Thank you so much for sharing!
| whoatethetardis chapter 7 . 1/27/2008
I thought this was a great story, many of the characters were particularly good. Thanks for putting it up.
| Grievous daydreamer chapter 7 . 11/17/2005
Wow...this is a great story! For once, im speechless!
| embargo chapter 7 . 10/19/2005
YAY! that was so god! i loved it! you're a good writer! and i like how you added xanatos with qui-gon. it was great! exellent story!
| Seylin chapter 7 . 10/11/2005
Yay -claps- great ending!
| onesmartgoalie chapter 7 . 10/10/2005
Good chapter. I love this story. You better get the sequel up soon...
| LuvObi chapter 7 . 10/10/2005
I just wanted to say that I love your story and I'm all for a sequel if you want to write one.
| Phantom666 chapter 7 . 10/9/2005
PLease write the sequal soon :) great series
| Seylin chapter 6 . 10/6/2005
YAY! I'm glad she's gonna be okay.