|Reviews for A grand adventure into Spira|
| Anasazi Darkmoon chapter 4 . 9/26/2006
Nicely done, although you need to capitalize your titles and make separate paragraphs for each person's part of the conversation.
"Did you find the gold chocobo?" Wakka asked.
"No, but I won't give up hope!" Yuna replied.
Otherwise, it becomes confusing for the reader. Other than that, though, I really do like this. If this is heading where I think it is, this will be the first Lulu/OC story I've seen. Good job!
| Anasazi Darkmoon chapter 1 . 7/10/2006
Hmm...well, it could use a little work, but it seems like a good beginning. I'll be keeping an eye on it, so update whenever you have the time.