I am wondering if you have a reason for using the title 'Clever Hans', which I know as the title of a fairy tale about an inept and slightly dim young man who follows the advice for carrying various goods, invariably getting it wrong with the next thing he is carrying. He loses his girlfriend by being stupid in the way he carries her gifts.

dead chill, chummer

wonderful, a Shadowrunner! Read your profile, a lot that sounds familiar there to me!
a good and compelling story so far.

Hey, with Shadowrun coming back with Harebrained Schemes, think you would start this up again as well? It should get some more attention.

Also, Blackwand Chronicles, another awesome fic you have going?

the thing is i've never heard about "Clever Hans" before, so, before reading this story, i should have researched everything about it. and so... I decided to read.

my applauses - this story has a great plot, storyline and, well, eveb though you didn't finish it, I don't regret time i spent reading.

hope it'll get an update one day :)

I am still unfamiliar with this fandom, but I very much enjoyed reading this fic. it has me interested.

I was wondering if Hans was a victim of organ donation?

I would like to read more of this.

I am really enjoying this fic so far, even though I don't know the genre it is from. I look forward to being able to read the next couple chapters. :)

Very good stuff. Shame you don't update it.

Hope to see more soon. And if not...well...one less spot in favs.

4/5

So far this is my favourite story of yours, it definitely needs updating.

An interesting tale. Given you say that this is all that you have written up and this last updated in 2005, I'm guessing we'll never hear if Hans was successful in either discovering his identity or saving the girl. Still, fun to read.

Hopefully someday you'll finish this...

What sort of adept powers does Hans have, anyway? Increased reflexes, improved stats, improved skills? Killing hands? Mystic armor?

I was going to protest the chapter 1 troll's use of the knife "fighters grip", point down, since using a knife in such a position decreases your range, and is more suited to defense than attacking. However, I remembered that trolls get 1 reach, and are damn tall. Point down would offer greater defensive ability, be useful for attacking a target much shorter than yourself, and trolls don't really have to worry about range.

Should Hans ever have to deal with trolls again, I recommend directly attacking the arms, instead of considering them obstacles defending more "valuable" targets. Without arms, most opponents are unable to fight or defend themselves. An elbow attack can devastate an incoming punch, and a quick parry followed by elbow attacks to an arm can disable it.

Once the arms are out of the way, it's easy pickings on the head and torso...

Very nice story and belivable characters. Do you have any plans to complete the story?

fairly interesting. Good job overall.

Good story so far, and an interesting genre. Perhaps a little fighting-heavy, but gripping stuff.

Tom

More, Please. Three chapters and I am hooked, severely. The story is so real, that I am living it thru the eyes of Hans. I need more.