|Reviews for Learning to Breathe|
| Pableroski chapter 21 . 3/14
It's a pity that so close to the end you decided to just stop it. Fortunately, it's almost complete so we can all guess, but it would have been better with a proper closure.
I still hope that you will do it one day.
| KEK chapter 18 . 11/18/2022
Oh I remember what this reminds me of now. It reminds me of those shtty plays children out on where they need to give someone a handicap for whatever reason so the kid onstage says something like “Oh! I have tripped and fallen on my wrist, it is broken! Oh no!” And then the narrator says “oh no! Whatever shall our hero do!” LOL
| KEK chapter 18 . 11/18/2022
First of all this fic aged poorly it ain’t that funny. It’s almost pure fluff. Well written fluff yes, but you can find that in smut fics. Secondly if you’re going to have a bit of plot don’t pull the “haha protagonist gets weakened by something stupid so we can have actual conflict because *whoopsie* my Gary Stu was a bit too strong!” This fic is old as hell but that’s doesn’t mean I can’t call out it’s flaws.
First of all the plot is all over the place you never should have tried to shove plot into a fluff fic, there’s no plot in slice of life animes for a reason. Youve ended up using so many plot contrivances in order for things to end up a certain way, you might as well just scrap it.
For example, your protagonist loses, it needs to have reasonable cause, if not it ruins the flow. Canon Harry Potter loses to Full power Voldemort? Of course he does voldemort’s got like 45 years of experience on him! And most of his losses are followed by heavier topics in the books. ie Killing himself or the death of mad eye moody.
Except in this fic, I am utterly dying over the reason for the protagonist losing this fight. “Oh no! He forgot to release his chakra weights!” HAHAHAHHAHAHA
That’s like having the MC lose by slipping on a fking banana right before he fights the evil king! You don’t mess with the cadence of plot relevant events. Oh and MIND CONTROL RING HAHAHAHAHAH
I forgot how crappy writing was back then, I’ll strive to find more recent fics. Not a good fluff fic, plot isn’t good enough to be a serious fic, and the humor is dated. It’s obvious the author made an OP character, realized he wanted plot so hastily crafted a bunch of lazy nerfs for his MC, and then shoved together a bland as fk storyline. Stick to fluff, even if smut writers can do it better.
| Leapyearbaby29 chapter 1 . 10/3/2022
So Harry didn’t go to school at all?
| MasterOfDeath7 chapter 21 . 9/3/2022
Great overall. Very funny. The only bits that I disliked were the Harry vs Draco fight and also the tap on the head to pass endless amounts of knowledge thing that Draco does to Ginny at the end. It feels extremely cheap. But overall, a great story.
| MasterOfDeath7 chapter 18 . 9/3/2022
Sorry, what? This shit has gone down the drain. How tf is Draco beating Harry? I don't care that Harry was limited by the bystanders and he had to protect them. He is being controlled but it is still Draco. It doesn't matter that he might have had some training. Harry is meant to be the strongest wizard in the world, yet fucking Draco is beating him? Smh.
| MasterOfDeath7 chapter 14 . 9/3/2022
The whole chapter had me dying. I was choking when Harry poked his head into the shower so casually.
| NiariaGal chapter 14 . 3/23/2022
| Flamuz chapter 1 . 3/3/2022
This makes no sense. First you establish the rules of your opponent, then change them out with something and someone more powerful? First rule of fantasy writing is that when you establish your rules don't break them or you'll ruin the story. Also you keep establishing points where Harry has learned something new, about how to interact and behave in social situations, only to later completely abandon it for at another fluff plot point?
I will give you that the idea you have based your story on is highly entertaining. But you execution of that idea is mind mindbogglingly confusing and illogical.
| Just William chapter 21 . 1/7/2022
You need to finish this story.
| SadMeatBag chapter 4 . 11/6/2021
I have to correct myself it's type "sense" not "sence".
| SadMeatBag chapter 1 . 11/6/2021
Hold up, you are saying Sirius is 9ft tall I don't use the imperial system but it equal to 2.7 meter and the tallest person in the world is 8.11ft aslo around 2.7 meter. Really, you expect him to be an active auror? He couldn't with that height just no man if he is 6ft then yeah that make sence.
| Hot48cricket1 chapter 18 . 7/29/2021
You jumped the shark with this chapter
| Hot48cricket1 chapter 17 . 7/29/2021
So the bitch Sammantha is going to come between Harry and Ginny?
Not a fan of this
| Hot48cricket1 chapter 14 . 7/28/2021
Katie is a right bitch