|Reviews for The Note|
| FMA4EVER chapter 1 . 8/19/2006
aw...that's so cute! this is so on my favs!
| rurouni madness-battousai obsession chapter 1 . 3/17/2006
I thought it was really cute and sweet! (Even if Inuyasha was a bit OOC)
| Almandine-Azaleea chapter 1 . 12/12/2005
Very very cute and fluffy, but(and it's a small but) try and alter your sentence structure a bit because it gets a little repetitive, and this takes away attention from the story, ok?
For example, you said: "He jumped...He went...He grabbed..." You could link all the sentences up, or at least simplify them a bit so that you don't have to keep saying "He". You could rewrite it as follows (just a suggestion): "He jumped in the well, making his way to her room quickly. Noticing she wasn't home he grabbed a pen and wrote a new list, leaving it on the bed as he retreated to Goshinboku to wait for her."
I hope this helps, and I really hope you won't be angry with me for the criticism. Your ideas are great though, you just need a bit of polishing. Don't give up though. Looking forward to reading more stories. _
| prettyinblack405 chapter 1 . 9/3/2005
Well, that was...unusual.
How could Inuyasha tell her he loves her that soon?
There wasn't even a real story line, they immediately got together. Inuyasha's character is more conservative and stubborn. I mean, it's not bad, just that it would of been better if it had happened on the third chapter. Like showing what happened before. :)
| xXxGoldenEyesxXx chapter 1 . 9/3/2005
aw-w-w-w-w-w-w-w-w-w-w-w-we... thats so cute! _
| Rincewinded chapter 1 . 9/3/2005
Hmm... It went too fast, and it was short... But, it was cute.
And, considering that I'm a guy saying that, it makes up for all else. lol
| Haruko-Mizumi chapter 1 . 9/3/2005
I loved it! It was very, very good!
| reincarnation16 chapter 1 . 9/3/2005
I love it! It's so sweet. Keep on writing fanfics!
| Tsubaki's Apprentice chapter 1 . 9/3/2005
That was so cool! This one-shot needs a sequel or somethin! Sweet and simple...just how I like it!
| AnimeLady Noriko chapter 1 . 9/3/2005
Aw! That was really cute. I loved the Inuyasha note thing! The only bad part was that the story went a little to fast for me, if you would have added a little more, like Kagome's surprise or more to the kiss part it would have been perfect!