Reviews for Love Hina: Troubles of a Ronin
Major Mike Powell III chapter 1 . 11/11/2015
Well, well, soldier...

I know this story is as dead in the water as the M1 Abrams tank callsign "War Pig" in "The Bog" (CoD4 reference FTW. :3), but still, a review is a review, no matter how dead the story may be. LOL

So, first things first: it's no secret that I despise Narusegawa Naru. There's no way I could ever lie nor try to deny that. However!

However. I know when I see no need to slide one in the chamber with her name on it. This first chapter here, while the opening portion was as formulaic as it gets, what with the 15 Years Ago flashback and all, the actual way the story opens up was kind of cool, actually. :3

Granted, I would have enjoyed the bully situation just a bit more of Keitaro acted more like Steve Rogers in the back-alley bully fight in "Captain America: The First Avenger" before his best friend, Sergeant Bucky Barnes shows up to sock the bully and take Steve off to see some girls at the Stark Fair...but I digress. LOL

Keitaro gets manhandled by bullies and Narusegawa saves him. That was very, very nice. Not gonna lie. :3 And Hell, I even smiled, honestly smiled, while she and Keitaro sat there and just talked...and yes, amazingly enough, I even let off a soft "D'aw~" when Naru smooched Keitaro because "reasons". ;3

So, yeah. I despise "Love Hina" -canon- and the girls' actual, original personalities and such, but if you're gonna make an AU "Love Hina" story, Hell, why the Hell would you not change the girls' character along? LOL

So, this story is, again, clearly dead in the water, but for what it was, this first chapter was nice and I have no problem with OOC Narusegawa Naru. I applaud it, even. o.o7

Nice work.

Semper-Fi! Carry on!
SavorSweet chapter 2 . 10/1/2007
XD btw i love ur story! o_o you pay for you email account?
Ruto Kuntai chapter 1 . 9/8/2007
Wow, its been ages since I read a great story with Keitaro and Naru as a couple, it had to be one of the better stories I have read in a long time. Your attention to detail and well made plot really is amazing, the way you detailed even the smallest actions was well written.

I don't see many Keitaro/Naru fanfictions that really catch my attention, but this story did. Also, great job with spelling, there weren't any errors.

Thank you for the great story,

Ruto Kuntai
findingparis chapter 1 . 10/29/2006
Whew. Nice. Nice.

I couldn't say more.

KeixNaru for eternity:)
Bobboky chapter 2 . 10/12/2005
deleted456 chapter 2 . 10/4/2005

WHY! This was one of the best starts to a Kei/Naru pairing ever! Why do you have to torment us so! I cant believe it! That sucks so much!

Darje chapter 1 . 9/24/2005
You go dude!

My fav pairing is Naru/Keitaro, SO far you have done an excellent job and the comment you made abotu character bashing is so true, some people can be so biased when they read stories.(adding to favs)
EagleCeres chapter 1 . 9/15/2005
Interesting twist on the original story, now I'm curious about how the other girls will fit in the story. Great chapter, hope to read more soon! :D
Irritus185 chapter 1 . 9/9/2005
pretty good. a few grammar changes but it's better than what i usually do. also, the mechanics of your writing style is kinda...wonky. i'll tell you when i get to talk to you again. on a separate note...ANOTHER KEITARO/NARU LOVER! MY FRIEND! MY GLORIOUS, NON-BASHER FRIEND! ahem, not that i got that out of my system...nice job. heh, hope to read more soon
deleted456 chapter 1 . 9/4/2005
You do know that this rules.

I love Keitaro/Naru pairings! Maybe you could have it as an alternate universe style thing. This started out really well and I can't wait until the next chapter! Keep up the good work!

wxnut chapter 1 . 9/4/2005
Not a bad read. Drop some of the "sadly"'s though. It's repetitive.
Innortal chapter 1 . 9/4/2005
Not a bad start. Nice to see them getting off on the right foot. Looking forward to more.

Airtran9906 chapter 1 . 9/4/2005
wow i realy liked how this thing stated it wasn't as...painfull as the tv show i liked this maybe naru will not hit kietaro around because it started out like this and is this going to be a naru x keitaro fic i'm just wondering cause i'm really tired of all these motoko x kietaro fics until the next chapter
Lunar Knite chapter 1 . 9/4/2005
WHE! I love Naru/Keitaro fics! I think this is a great story so far, and I can't wait to see your next installment, along with 'Blind Love'.
vamp1000 chapter 1 . 9/4/2005
good opening. I myself hate character bashing and kei/naru forever! In the name of thy son, thy father, and thy holy ghost, amen