|Reviews for The Trip Home|
| Reality check chapter 1 . 5/25/2016
You know the story has great potential you should really consider making into a full story my advice two words right and honestly I'm giving you some good advice you remember what made Naruto a good show okay remember what the hidden Leaf represent and don't call it but the ancient name it's called the hidden in the leaf Village the name I can't pronounce it it so I do apologize my Android phone make it into a full story but secondly no military lingo you do not need it okay it's not to throw itself but not too and he'd leave it all hidden Leaf Village is a mercenary's to get paid to protect others it's what mercenaries do but they don't have military ranks thirdly you gotta make it a good long story good amount of chapters secondly you want to make us believe something like this is possible within in the Naruto universe and last but not least try to remember how the notes of story works and try your best stick true to what he is and please know lemon cuz it's disrespectful to the characters and the man who wrote the story if you are a true Naruto fan and like the character as he is then please and for the rest of us fans keep Naruto true to what he is and why he does things because the story is very possible could have happened a possible different timeline that didn't happen keep in mind it doesn't change who Naruto is it just changes the events and outcomes of certain also another suggestion don't have your fanfic the light on making couples of ninjas in the Naruto anime Shikamaru and Temari with just friends please keep this in mind when writing the story don't you story and a couple of other characters together just write your story and if it seemed like a good idea at the time though it also keep in mind the hyuga clan look like each other for various reasons I don't think I could tell you why but if you don't feel comfortable writing the story and don't worry about her just have her go to the store and she only did it out trying to pay her off with anyone but if you could clean them but they would never be allowed and I don't know the last movie don't we start on that fanfic based movie and I have enough evidence to prove it that's why I'm saying don't start up on that one I like it still has great potential look forward to reading it and make it and make it very believable okay because even in fanfiction every artist has to have the whole story based and some ground it possible a reality or nothing crazy and please no bashing of character because that's really immature the characters of Lord yes show the flaws and show their chance at Redemption that's always suggest thank you I appreciate it
| bleach1990 chapter 1 . 4/2/2013
i would like you to do more with this it is good just reading this one bit made me want more so if you do do more that would be very cool
| getsuga1993 chapter 1 . 1/4/2013
has potential to be a good story or at least a sequel anyway i know its been over seven but its good
| ALIASECHO chapter 1 . 7/13/2012
This was a great story, it has the potential to be made longer, I know it's been 7 years but if did decide to continue it that would make me happy.
| justin the constant reviewer chapter 1 . 3/26/2011
very good u must continue
| Danmaku-OverLord Wang-Yu chapter 1 . 6/26/2010
me gusto cuntinualo
| Red Vindicator chapter 1 . 3/19/2010
5 years later and you should continue this! Its like a perfect chapter to open a story with!
| Lixie Lorn chapter 1 . 4/7/2009
I hope you continue this. Tayuya is MY bishie.
| Markyys chapter 1 . 2/19/2009
I think it has some potential. Naruto/Tayuya is my favorite pairing, but I don't see much of it at all, so I would definitely be interested in seeing more of this, even just more one-shots.
I'm a sucker for sappy romance...
| Misao2008 chapter 1 . 2/14/2009
What the heck is wrong with you! Don't stop now! This could be the beggining of an awesome story!You've just GOT to keep going!
| delete this acc plz chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
you should be cause this is a hell of a creation :D
| Haru Inuzuka chapter 1 . 6/12/2008
Hmm, not bad. Continue and we'll see, now won't we? -
| DrendeSalkash chapter 1 . 12/31/2007
this is worth a continuance.
| Cotton Candi Drug chapter 1 . 12/30/2007
Please continue, it'd make for a great fic.
| A Dizzle chapter 1 . 12/28/2007