|Reviews for Of Men, Elves and Snowballs|
| WolfsongDarkforest chapter 2 . 3/10
Oh. My. Goodness. Not kidding, I laughed until I choked as I was reading this. The word 'snowball' adds a fair touch of humor to the story, and I love it!
Just as a totally random question, which has been bugging me, what exactly does OC and AU stand for? I know that OC means created by the author, and is not published, but I don't know the exact words... It would be a great help to me.
Love the story,
| icecoldfairy chapter 2 . 1/8
Legolas always wins ;) Nice story
| ShiraChan-Desu chapter 1 . 12/15/2013
-Breaks down lauughing-
| ForeverRainingFire chapter 2 . 8/1/2013
Great story! I really enjoyed it! So funny!
| intoxicatedasphyxiation chapter 2 . 7/15/2013
Great tale. Loved it so much.
| Whisperwill chapter 1 . 5/22/2013
Oh, bravo, indeed!
You know, I don't often laugh out loud when I'm reading a story. But I laughed aloud several times as I read this one, and I've included the parts that I found the funniest:
feeling slightly less embarrassed as he pictured the grim long-legged man attempting to tiptoe across a snowy field. [Just the mental picture this sentence created had me in stitches.]
"It seems that those things are of some use after all," [This was a priceless one-liner, and you set it up perfectly!]
It was the dwarf's turn to look disbelieving. "And I suppose that snowball just hit me of its own accord then," he demanded angrily, trying in vain to reach around to the back of his head to brush away the snow gathered there.
"Do not be a fool," replied the elf coldly, "however much it becomes you. Aragorn is the one responsible for the snow which now covers you."
Gimli turned to look at the ranger, who had by this time started back up the mountain and looked up innocently at the sound of one of his many names. Gimli turned back to the elf.
"Aragorn!" he barked. "Aragorn! What reason would he have to hurl a snowball at me?"
"Many come to mind, but it is best that you ask him that yourself," Legolas replied coolly, and turned to continue on his way, but the dwarf, clutching one of his axes, moved to bar the elf's path. [This dialogue is genius! The play off between characters, the natural flow of words and progression from one topic to the next, the level of comedy...highly impressive!]
who were now standing face to chest still trading verbal blows [Taking an often-used line and twisting it around to be comedic...this is GREAT!]
I liked how you began your story, with the bird. Beautiful wording. I also enjoyed the long descriptions of each character, and Legolas's appraisal of each of them, near the story's beginning. I was surprised by how much l liked this fic, actually, since there was a lot of it I didn't agree with. It doesn't seem to me that Aragorn and Legolas are the type to constantly goad each other...but I loved reading how their squabble unfolded. Legolas doesn't seem the type to me to aim an arrow at any of his fellow Fellowship members...but it was entertaining. Nor do I think it would've come down to combat between him and Gimli...but I loved every moment of the read! And, even if I don't think you represented Tolkien's world totally in-character, you managed to convince me that your way of writing might be valid, even if I don't agree with it all as it unfolds. Maybe that's the greatest mark of a great writer.
I also like to beta stories as I read. I included a couple of corrections (though I didn't see many at all. You're truly a good writer, and your words and punctuation are inspirational!):
He decided that the Man was not responsible for the freezing water now at the small of his back, for the man's thoughts seemed directed elsewhere as he marched onwards, occasional glancing towards the rear of the party. You didn't capitalize "man's" in this sentence...I don't know if you meant to consistently capitalize every reference to "Man/Men" throughout your story, or not.
Between Frodo and Bill, Legolas was surprised that the hobbit had anytime to see to his own needs. I think "anytime" would be two words here ("any" and "time").
Second-born vs. firstborn. You used different punctuation/capitalization for these two terms. Don't know if you meant to do it, but I thought I'd point it out just in case.
Sam noticed that he had an arrow notched and was stroking it's fletching repeatedly. "It's" only has an apostrophe in it if you're using the contraction "it is."
Finally, I included a couple of questions in case you're one of those authors who replies to reviews:
What does "mellon nin" mean?
Would "Human" be a Lord of the Rings term? I've heard of "Men" and "Man," but "Human"? I'm not sure.
| Larisya chapter 2 . 3/27/2013
For Heaven's sake!
| human28 chapter 2 . 1/28/2013
I've been reading several of your fics and have not stopped laughing! You write extremely well!
| Sajna18 chapter 1 . 1/21/2013
I can certainly see how annoying it would be to have one member nice and warm not covered in waist deep snow! A snowball fight always seems to lighten up the mood as well! Loved the story!
| Galiar chapter 2 . 12/21/2012
Haha, awesome! Laughed so much!x'D
| EstelMiOlor chapter 2 . 9/25/2012
Tee hee...you're funny! What a great story! I loved the first chapter and this "sequel" is also hilarious. Legolas was super annoying on Caradhras so I'm impressed other members of the Fellowship didn't join in the snowballing. Of course, who can resist a snowball fight? Nice work!
| bespectacledfanwarrior chapter 2 . 7/22/2011
You genius! That's honestly one of the funniest things I've ever read, I couldn't stop laughing for about five minutes afterwards. I love the bit at the end where one of the guards gets involved. I also like how long it takes Gimli to realise it was Aragorn, not Legolas. :)
| Jedi Arwen Sparrow Winchester chapter 2 . 4/5/2011
Gimli's mouth opened slightly as he stared at the king of Gondor. "It was not the Elf?" he questioned, unsure that he had heard the man correctly.
"Nay," confirmed Aragorn. "It was Sam."
All the character are so wonderfully cheeky here!
And the part about Pippin being in the service of Gondor was hysterical, I nearly fell out of my chair!
You are a FANTASTIC writer!
| Jedi Arwen Sparrow Winchester chapter 1 . 4/5/2011
I really like your writing style, Evergreene. This story is so humourous and funny, and it's so well written...
It's impossible for me to not add it to my favorites :D
| Flying Stone chapter 2 . 1/27/2011
Oh. My. Gosh. I love it! It just snowed today and I was looking for a happy snow story to make me laugh, and I found it here! Great story, keep on writing! :-)