|Reviews for A Second Chance|
| duj chapter 14 . 5/15/2006
Potato salad sandwiches were weird enough, but toasted?
| notwritten chapter 14 . 5/14/2006
| yunsi chapter 14 . 5/14/2006
"snarky git" "should be illegal in the morning" really nice...
I don't really get the conversation about the tea, but that might just be me...
"I happen to most of a pack of sandwich bread in the back.”
Think you left out "have"
I just love this image of Jane waving a spatuala at Snape!
The last part I also didn't get. Why does Jane ask if that explains his stomach?
I really liked this chapter, Snow. Like you said, I think it's a nice change and a step forward in their relationship for Jane to be taking care of Snape...
| Softballchick dreaowa chapter 14 . 5/14/2006
someone finally reliszes what their freindship looks like from the outside!
| yunsi chapter 13 . 5/7/2006
Woot! Finally reviewing your fanfic! (Well, actually, I tried reviewing earlier, but the stupid thing was down.)
“It wasn’t that he never heard cars pass by (he lived next to the road, after all), but the fact that the car didn’t seem to have passed by like every other car did.”
Might want to check the logic of that…
“to shovel an unhealthy chunk into his mouth”
Argh….You just ruined it…_
“Nice to know I’m appreciated.”
“He startled her, causing her to spill the crumbs back on the plate. She looked disgruntled.”
So heartbreakingly cute. Okay, sorry, I’ll stop commenting on every other line…
I don’t get the whole seriousness-y of the whole Jane w/ the piano scene. I mean…so is it a clue to Jane regaining her memories? Oh well, I really enjoyed how Jane was chasing Ginger, and Snape was being evil. )
“I suppose, if you don’t connect it to the mass right there. Then it looks like the tail of a dead fish.”
“Thanks for ruining the image.”
Woo-hoo! That was nicely done.
What a cliff-hanger! The ending’s so sweet! I want to read more!
| cricketsong chapter 13 . 5/4/2006
what will Hermione/Jane do if/when her memories begin to return and she realizes this man she trusts has been hiding he own life story from her?...
| NightShade25 chapter 1 . 4/30/2006
I love your story. I think its Wonderfull and i shall await further chapters most egerly. Kudos and Thanks!
| Deannit chapter 12 . 4/23/2006
Thank you for the update! (And sorry for the late review...)
Your story still has that 'special magic' touch to it. Good details, good pace - good read.
| Purple Archer chapter 12 . 3/12/2006
that was so sweet! they really are the perfect couple! i think that the walk on the beach on sunset was the most romantic thing they did on their vacation. _ update soon... :)
| azulkan2 chapter 12 . 3/11/2006
Glad to see the update. Glad they seem to be back "together". Looking forward to the next part.
| olivialynlee chapter 12 . 3/11/2006
I don't know what you mean about that chapter being choppy. It was absolutely perfect. I loved the way Hermione woke up in the morning when she realized that she had slept so late. :) Too funny! Especially when she threatened Severus. lol- I also loved the scene in the jewlery store. So sweet and I agree the ending was delightful. As I have mentioned before, I love your writing style and flow. The chapter was excellent and I cannot wait to see what awaits our pair after this wonderful trip. :)
| Natsuyori chapter 12 . 3/11/2006
awesome day! i felt like i was there too!
| yunsi chapter 11 . 2/8/2006
Sorry, I've been busy recently. I know this is kind of late...
Kewl...The Ink Pot sounds like a really interesting name for a forum...I'll go check it out later...
Quit dissing your writing. Your complaints are making mediocre authors like me develop a sudden desire to throw our worthless bodies into the big wide ocean. I would be happy if I could write half as good as you, k?
Lol... "Wincing for her knuckles and for the glass"
That was one sweet mental image. ) Jane flinging the table at Snape would have been so...so...me no know? In character?
"emotionally unstable female"
*giggles bursting out of nowhere* Whee...I'm enjoying this scene where Snape is in pain...
"I’m starting to wonder what my brain’s up to now" Scary...
Anyway, I loved the ending so much. It was really nice sweet, kind of like how I would have imagined it.
By the way, did you know that your first sentence says: "Sorry for the long update!" That doesn't make any sense...
| olivialynlee chapter 11 . 2/6/2006
I don't know what you mean. This chapter was as well done as all the rest. I am very intriguied and cannot wait to see what happens next. I really like how you are developing the relationship between the two, but I am a little worried about what will happen when Hermione learns the truth. Don't worry about how long it takes, I will look forward to reading another chapter by you when it comes. Excellent, excellent job!
| Lily of the Shadow chapter 11 . 2/4/2006
*singsong* Theyre growing closer!
Interesting how this is progressing... I wonder what's going to come out of the incident with the bookstore?