|Reviews for Kingdom Hearts: Sin Angel|
| Tikigod784 chapter 8 . 4/15/2007
GAH! NO! DON'T make konoka and setsuna go to the brother blood guy...
then they'll become stupid brainwashed people...
man...and here I thought those two were gonna chill with Sora and Cygnus...sigh
seriously. the whole brother blood thing just seems so stupid to me...why not have them chill with Sara instead? or Maya...
meh, whatever. I'll begrudgingly keep reading this if you update again...
| Max chapter 7 . 3/22/2006
Hey! Like your crossover Kingdom Hearts and other series, like Sonic and Negima. Speaking of it, I'm a Negima fan and a member of and would offer some help for your story. Such as a few needed fixings in the story script. Keep it up and e-mail me! _
| asativa chapter 5 . 1/12/2006
Your introduction of a new canon isn't bad. I don't get much idea about Negi's background, but that doesn't come in too much... right?
But I can understand the concept of what he looks like, his personality, his profession, etc.
If I may say so, I think the incredible amount of non-KH characters is bogging down your story. People read KH fanfiction to read about KH... not every other fandom you read. Honestly, I love Sonic and Mario and everything else sounds really interesting, but I'd rather read about Sora, Riku, Kairi (as much as I hate her), and the rest of the KH characters.
Go read a crossover with characters you don't know and you'll see what I mean. The characters you have are fine, just try to avoid adding more characters that appear for all of one chapter. It feels... forced.
I'm being critical than usual - it must be the review box. But I don't mean to insult you or anything.
Everything else seems fine - your word usage and such has improved a lot. Just bring the focus back on the conflict - Main Characters Vs. Bad Guys, or whatever. I feel like you're losing that underneath all the sub-plots.
| GaiaCleaver chapter 5 . 12/21/2005
Dude, this story is the bomb! Negima and Kingdom Hearts go very well together, too, and I like the idea of Sonic being added in. Please write more!
Your loyal reader, Gaia Cleaver.
| Jomasten chapter 1 . 12/6/2005
SUCH A MAGNIFICENCE OF WORDS!
tHE MENGARIE OF ART IN THE PROSE FORM!
Write more! This is an awsome story!
Dark Alley Joma of the "Forum"
note: I'm glad for the KonoStsu pairing. keep up the good work!
| beta reader wanna be chapter 4 . 11/24/2005
you go person! give me a chapter and ill give honest feedback!