Reviews for The Return of the Saviour
Debbie chapter 17 . 6/27
Enjoyed it a lot. I only read completed stories because I am not good at waiting. Like it a lot.
SnufflesTheGrim227 chapter 2 . 11/9/2015
Your description of the essence of magic is similar to the Hindu concept of Brahman. Not bringing religion into this, just asking if that was intentional.
Guest chapter 14 . 11/7/2015
If you don't get the hospital joke... what else takes nine moths? Heehee... Dirty joke...

Great chapter! But Luna feels a bit OOC to me, and it makes me feel like I am reading a Harry/OC fic not a Harry/Luna fic, though you are getting better at getting down luna's personality.
Guest chapter 13 . 11/6/2015
Did you update at the hospital *wink wink troll face*
Guest chapter 9 . 11/6/2015
Didn't Snape (R.I.P) make the wolf'sbane potion?
Guest chapter 6 . 11/6/2015
Y-you... YOU KILLED HEDWIG! WHAT THE HELL! WHY DID YOU DO THAT!
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 17 . 11/5/2015
Great story. Still needs a few corrections.

I don't think that Luna is the type to bitch-slap someone, especially her lover. Hermione would, unquestionably. That's one of the things I hate about Hermione. She's even more emotionally immature than Ron, yet she thinks she's the more mature one. But it's completely OOC for Luna, who is never perturbed by anything anybody does to her, only to insults to her father and his magazine and beliefs.

Canon Luna would have seen through Harry's disguise, so the fact that she couldn't is also OOC. But she recognizes enough of Harry that she falls in love with him as James so I'm chalking it up to a change in his magic as well as his appearance.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 3 . 11/4/2015
Dumbledore must be getting horribly senile if he relies on a Rememberall now.
Goose chapter 16 . 8/6/2015
Getting hit by a flaming tornado making impact faster than the speed of light would completely obliterate someone. Nothing would be left. He would literally be destroyed down to the last atom.
DylanL chapter 17 . 7/9/2015
harry told luna on halloween after their kiss during the halloween ball before harry's first confrontation with voldemort, not at christmas which was when hermione insulted luna and luna made that comment about harry's bum freckle. speaking of christmas that just reminded me, if harry could knock away all his friends when they burst into the hall at christmas and call it a reflex then why didnt he do the same with the DEs when they burst in, last chapter and as i mentioned in the chapter where voldemort attacked hogsmeade, snape had declared his loyalty back before harry disappeared. i also didnt like the talk between dumbledore, snape, and harry. i felt that you had gone back on what you had previously stated concerning harry's feelings about dumbledore and how snape's behavior around dumbledore also changed after he drugged harry and learned what harry thought of dumbledore, you had said that snape was acting differently from dumbledore's POV, and the snape at the end was more like mcgonagal in his staunch support of dumbledore.
DylanL chapter 16 . 7/9/2015
it really took wormtail 3.5 months to get into the castle and follow harry? also wasnt harry's watch supposed to alert him to DEs entering the wards. not to mention the fact that im sure he could have created a ward against animagi so wormtail couldnt get in.
DylanL chapter 12 . 7/9/2015
harry would never have been dumb enough to drink something prepared by an enemy, as proven in OotP when he didnt drink umbridge's tea for the same reason. harry knew snape was attempting to learn hie secrets yet willingly walked into the trap, even knowing it was most likely a trap, then gave up all that info when harry ought to have been able to throw off the veritaserum if he can throw away pain and throw off the imperius curse. it makes no sense. for that matter why didnt magic itself intervene to protect its identity.
DylanL chapter 11 . 7/9/2015
why is there sunshine at what has to be at least 9pm in late fall in scotland. i have also been wondering, if nothing is impossible, why doesnt harry simply wish for voldemort and his followers to be dead, why is he doing things like fighting voldemort in hogsmead instead of simply doing something like with the express and forcing his magic to round up every DE and heal the wounded. and why the hell is snape meeting with voldemort after he publicly declared his allegiance to the Light in the first chapter.
DylanL chapter 3 . 7/8/2015
you got harry's age wrong, he was born in 1980 so 2000 is his 20th not 21st birthday and you said he was going back on his 21st birthday. i also think you need to have this betaed again, twice you used 'were' instead of 'was' in the same sentence, and near the beginning of the chapter you used 'was' instead of 'way' when leo was talking about harry keeping his identity a secrect
DylanL chapter 2 . 7/8/2015
interesting story so far. just want to say that you should remove all the underlining in this chapter.
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