Reviews for Kurayami no akai bara
Marine Knows chapter 1 . 6/16/2006
Very good one. I enjoyed it greatly... I guess I like your melancholic way of writing.
MrsPiccolosWife chapter 1 . 3/21/2006
That was so angsty and sad..:( I love Kurama! You are such an amazing poet! yay!
miniri02 chapter 1 . 10/19/2005
crimson gates of paradise chapter 1 . 10/17/2005
Usually I'm not that much of a poem person. And not much of a yu yu hakusho one either, but there was a nice feeling to the poem.

Oh and there was one point where I kind of got thrown out when reading... That was with that really long line consisting of two sentences and directly after that a really short one. There I got thrown out of the rythm and because of that lost track of it.

But the rest of it was really nice, a much better poem than what I could ever attempt to write, lol
neko kitkat chapter 1 . 10/16/2005
COOL poem loved it!_ more please!
xDisenchantedx chapter 1 . 10/16/2005
This was pretty well written and definately held emotion, which is really good in all types of writing. The way you mixed japanese and english together made it pretty original. The only thing I noticed was, if this wasn't meant to be a freeform, you need a more solid beat to it. Freeform poetry doesn't have a solid beat of course it's just...i don't know. But if you didn't want it like that then the beat needs to be more solid so it flows a bit easier when you read it. Nice Job

- Nanashi Naomi -

PS I have a yyh story if you'd like to check it out. Don't feel like you have to just 'cause I reviewed, just suggesting it if you get bored sometime.
Fujiko-san chapter 1 . 10/15/2005
holas! vale avisar...! linda! me encanto...
psycogirl234 chapter 1 . 10/14/2005
I love it if yu have anymore said it to please