|Reviews for The Scapegoat|
| Jazz E. Roisin chapter 1 . 3/15/2009
This is a good story. It feels rushed and it would work better as something longer than a one-shot.
Also please read carefully through this. You change tense frequently and it's so sudden that the change brings the reader out of the story.
Also delete the explanations at the beginning. They are not needed. You set up the plot so strongly that it doesn't matter what hair and eye-color James and Lily have.
What was most intriguing about this was the Scandinavians. Scandinavian history, especially that of Finland, is full of other countries taking Scandinavian countries over. The Swedes were the only country with Vikings. For centuries the Finnish fought wars with Russia, The Soviet Union, Sweden, because all those countries wanted Finland b/c of it's 200,0 lakes and it's abundance of natural resources. So if you are going to use Scandinavians be specific as to which country you choose. Because not all of the Scandinavians were violent people who wanted to conquer other countries.
I would love to read an expansion of this where you developed the lives of James' parents more thoroughly so that James' mentioned nobility comes into play.
Kudos on a great plot.
| HarryluvsMoaningMyrtle chapter 1 . 11/14/2005
this was a really great story. i hope you got a good grade on it.
| J.E.A.R.K.Potter chapter 1 . 10/23/2005
Great story! It was very expressive. An excellent of my favorite things; a bit of history and fiction. I would like to see what you would add, but it is great the way it is.-(Erin)J.E.A.R.