Reviews for The War Within
Wolfman16 chapter 3 . 12/17/2006
This story sounds a lot like the game Shattered Union, and it takes place at the sametime the game does... I like that game, good job
CAmn Brenkus chapter 10 . 9/15/2006
Good stuff "Sgt. Bob". Add some more or I shall cry
joebthegreat chapter 10 . 7/27/2006
Boom... explosions are fun!

Good story... good job... good night...

*falls asleep*

*wakes up*

Is this still here? oops...

*is about to click submit but falls asleep*

*wakes up*

sorry... but this is a good story...
ME chapter 1 . 7/7/2006
hello. reviewing is fun.

I haven't actually read this yet, but I know you're a good writer.
MedicWolfram chapter 9 . 6/26/2006
Hey, just read all teh chapters, and wow I am really enjoying the cliffhangers, please update soon i cant wait.
TyneBytes chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
OH MY GOD! i don't believe you actually read that! *blush* what can i say i AM a slash writer. I'm glad you liked it! yes, my new name was given to me by the wonderful forensics freshman. just read the first chapter, looks pretty sweet. gah, i'm supposed to be on Hey!Math so i gotta go. se ya tomorrow.
joebthegreat chapter 9 . 1/13/2006
I think the kid should die in a strange twist of fate and then in a DBZ style he should come back to life...

then he can die 26 more times in this story!

but seriously... it was cool... but that gun... since when did a bunch of rag-tag resistance peeps get a gun like that?
marcus chapter 9 . 1/9/2006
Good battle,... so far. Interesting ending,will the next chapter be up?...
joebthegreat chapter 8 . 12/23/2005

yea... ok then... very interesting... I cant wait for the next chapter... (actually I can... but that wouldnt sound all that great)
the templar of the states chapter 8 . 12/23/2005
nice buddy,

describe the enemies, i'm workin on my chapter and i need sum help, so small suggestions could help. o, i got sum suggestions for you. i play viedo games, alot of video games. and mainly i play, BF2 (battlefield) and sum of the missions ive played have influenced my stories. (the whole jumpin out of a window thing)

MyLastStand chapter 7 . 12/20/2005
Hey. Awesome story. I'm a big fan of Freedom Fighters. I thought you described the fights really well. The dialogue could use a little work & you don't describe some of the areas enough but other than that you're doing a kick ass job. It'd be pretty sweet if you made the next chapter about a mission that was something along the lines of a large ambush using the vehicles the Resistance captured & the TA-33. But you're the author, do what you want.
joebthegreat chapter 7 . 12/17/2005
you didnt like Agent Smith from the Matrix! OMFG I HOPE YOUR CHILDREN SWARM YOU ONE DAY AND EAT YOU!11

cool... can you like... make him a retard now?
THE TEMPLAR OF THE STATES chapter 7 . 12/16/2005
Ok, man lemme elaborate on somthing for you. Thanks for the review, Ameriacan hummers don't have 3 barreled machine guns on top, sorry, but its true, it only has a single barreld 50. calibre machine gun/cannon. Trust me I'm and army buff. I need a few suggestions, so if you could drop me another e-mail, that'd be great. your help would be greatly appreiciated.

Marcus chapter 7 . 12/16/2005
AWESOME, cool ending to the fight but geez you turned a tower into splinters wow. Cant wait for the next chapter.
Marcus chapter 6 . 12/11/2005
Awesome fight but you should say magazine instead of clip. And how about this for an idea Vietnam boats.
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