|Reviews for The Alternate Ending: Transall Saga|
| David chapter 1 . 12/17/2013
Not that it makes too much of a difference, but I would make a few changes. First, I think that when Mark travels through time periods it shouldn't bring him back to the exact time he left, meaning the time should have passed normally. This makes more sense in my mind because he would have aged and grown into the man he has become. So, his parents would have missed him, questioned his disappearance, and congratulated his returning. Also, when he travels back to Transall it would be twenty years in the future, but Mark still manages to find his way back to the Tsook and meet up with Megaan. Of course they've both aged quite a bit, but they still recognize each other and are still in love. They get married, start a family, and live a happy life as Tsooks, I mean they're only like 37 years old at this point haha. Then you would have to put in perspective as to how he got healed when he traveled time. It's simple, The light obviously has healing capabilities.
Or you could go could throw all this out and say that time doesn't pass when you travel time back and fourth through time. I do like your concept, it puts more of a happy ending to the story. To me though it just makes more sense in my mind my way; this isn't Narnia after all. Haha
| Hamba Allah SWT chapter 1 . 11/8/2013
What the way of this Story ?
| John chapter 1 . 9/28/2013
If he would've have gone back billions would've still died, and he didn't have the claw necklace he gave it to sarbo...
| Tip chapter 1 . 9/19/2013
I was sad that mark went back to his time. Also that he was trying to fix the disaster. If he did that Megaan would never exist.
| Pat chapter 1 . 7/30/2013
This is probably my favorite childhood book. Great alternate ending! I can tell you put a lot of work into this.
| A.WITT chapter 1 . 7/26/2013
I wanted Mark to return too.
| Guest chapter 1 . 6/23/2013
Awesome man! Job well done. I like your version better
| Ashwin Ramani chapter 1 . 6/2/2013
I love it. This is a better ending than the one in the book.
| Artumion chapter 1 . 5/26/2013
Love it... could have used a little more action and adventure... like maybe him killing the scouts and walking back to the villiage... but it was good and i loved the amazing turn of events from the ending
| Artumion chapter 1 . 5/25/2013
Read the first three lines and said screw this i wanna read the book again first. It's been 8 years! will let you know when i'm done
| rachelle chapter 1 . 4/11/2013
that was wonderful! i loved it so much it was soo cute and nice and i loved it!
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/8/2013
Way better than the ending in the book ;)
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/16/2013
thats how the book should have ended your ending is way better then Gary Paulsens ending in my mind your ending is the way the book actually ends
| Jonathan chapter 1 . 2/9/2013
If he would have gone back everyone would've died from disease so...
| Ak chapter 1 . 9/16/2012
Not bad, but pretty sure Sarbo was given the claw necklace. :/