|Reviews for some one new|
| solonggoodbye chapter 3 . 4/11/2006
I'm sorry to say this, but I really don't like your story.
Firstly, it's very confusing- there are a lot of times in all the chapters where I didn't know what was going on because of grammar or spelling mistakes.
Second, your original characters are quite Mary-Sueish. All the special abilites they have, the way they act, they just aren't very realistic, not even for Harry Potter.
Third- Why is Lupin there? He was DADA teacher, and Tana now has that job...so why is he there?
Forth- If this is meant to take place in Seventh year, then why is Dumbledore there? He's dead! He died at the end of the sixth book.
Fifth- Harry is completely out of character- he would never be goth. And since you've not indicated that this is an AU story, then... *shrugs*
Anyway, I'm sorry if this sounds a little snarky or rude, I'm not trying to be- just giving you some advice, and pointing out what I don't like.
Hopefully you can improve! _
| Witchitaito chapter 2 . 11/29/2005
Oh my this was terrific!
I haven't read somthing so good in ages. you can take this story in so many directions. Keep it up. I can't wait to read what happens next!
| calamityroo chapter 1 . 11/14/2005
This sounds really cool! I can't wait for the next chapter!