|Reviews for Home Coming|
| Shadowsakura321 chapter 1 . 7/17/2007
aw, that was hott n sweet!
| Amanda E. S chapter 1 . 3/8/2006
write more stories like this one!
| JackAddict chapter 1 . 3/7/2006
WOW, I mean, WOW! I actually spent a long time reading this, enjoying it, re-reading certain parts over and over again. I'm so loving this and I'm putting it on my favorites list so I can find it again at leisure :D
I think I felt some butterflies down there myself while reading this. lol.
anyway, you really got tony down to a tee, i can so see him like that, the little bit of sarcasm and wise-ass guy, not to mention the omnipresent hotness and sexiness. don't they say, almeida is god? lol. seems to be true :D.
great work. what a birthday present for a guy :)
| berki-n-chris chapter 1 . 1/21/2006
Wow! That story was amazing. I can't believe all the detail. God, I have to go take a cold shower.
Again, great story.
Love Tony and Michelle in 24.
| twentyfourrocks chapter 1 . 11/24/2005
This was really sweet. I liked that you managed to keep it very intimate and romantic so that it didnt seem too over the top but fit well into the storyline you developed. The beginning was so funny and the entire thing was sweet and romantic. great job! please keep writing (and soon!) :)
| AlmeidaFluff chapter 1 . 11/20/2005
When I requested some hot monkey sex for T&M, I didn't know you were gonna damn near give me a heart attack in the process. ROFL. You really know how to set a computer screen on fire, woman.
Michelle? This is a woman who knows how to put together a nice birthday present, to put it mildly. Some of her retorts were *priceless* in their brevity and simplicity: "“In” she instructed." LOL.
Her bluntness and directness, too, created such a steamy environment, I thought:
“Take off your clothes” she commanded as she turned and sat on the edge of the bed."
And this one — a personal favorite:
"'Patience, honey, is a virtue,' she said as her eyes fixed on regions below the equator."
(I'll be borrowing those last four words, BTW. Look for them in some upcoming chapter. They're too good to hoard all to yourself. %-)
Tony the Tiger (ROFL): His dialogue throughout was so dead-on, I thought. I see him much the same way as you, MB, with just enough wise-guy in him to make ya chuckle, but always that ever-present, underlying sexiness sitting right beneath the surface. These were some of my favorite lines: "'How long do I have to be good?' he asked as he slid his boxers off..."; "'I thought you liked me when I’m bad,' he said in a low, seducing voice..."; and (this one's so beautifully dry) "So his wife wanted him to strip for her… that was something he could do."
Oh, and "Girly bubbles." Hahahaha. I also loved how he kept asking when he could "open his present." %-D
You've got so many knock-out descriptors in here, as well, MB, e.g., drag out she pleasure; moved in for the kill; the scent...tingling in their nostrils; lips parted lips and tongue searched out tongue, etc. Even such descriptors as "lopsided grin" and "my brother’s ugly mug" went far in painting a visual of the exact expression on the faces.
This nearly knocked me out of my seat! "... she covered his lips with hers as he stiffened, lost all control and moaned into her mouth." Whoa. (I want Tony for my birthday. Can you arrange that, please?)
All in all, from the setting Michelle had created for his birthday (candles; black silk robe; the negligee he had given her; the bold, direct attitude and delivery) to the assorted bath and bedroom activities, to their sexy, playful bantering, I thought this story was hot as hell and a superlative effort on your part. Needless to say — VERY needless to say — I'll be reading this over again... possibly a dozen more times... and would LOVE to see more.
| crazydude24 chapter 1 . 11/18/2005
I think I saw smoke coming off of my monitor when I was reading this. Very steamy, and I laughed a lot at the beginning with Tony's brother:
/ “Hey… Where’s Michelle?” he sounded like a pitiful child who did not get what he wanted for Christmas.
“I know I’m not as pretty as Michelle, but you don’t have to sound like you lost your best friend” he teased. \\
This fic was extremely well-written, and I definitely enjoyed reading it. I think I enjoyed Missing Minor Detail a bit more, but this one was still excellent. Keep it up... I'm really enjoying the way you've written the characters.
| 24fan chapter 1 . 11/17/2005
Wow! Very hot! Loved it!
| Joe's girl chapter 1 . 11/16/2005
Damn M! That was hot! Excuse me while I go crawl into a cold shower. I think I'm actually sweating.
I think what I liked about this and what sets it apart from a lot of other hot, sweaty love scenes is that Michelle is in control for virtually the entire scene. Most love scenes put Tony in control or they share control pretty equally. In this case it is all Michelle and she is wonderful at it.
Your dialogue and description is great. I can see Tony in that bathtub and hear him saying the words. (Now if I could only find a way to step into the scene, drag Michelle kicking and screaming out of the bathroom and lock her in a closet and go have my way with Tony, everything would be perfect!)
Loved the story! Keep writing.
| bookworm03 chapter 1 . 11/16/2005
That was...hot. LOL. You definitely achieved your goal that's for sure! I almost had to go take a cold shower after that one...And yet somehow it still managed to be as sweet as ever...Adored it. Wonderfully written. Can't wait to see what you come up with next!
| Amy chapter 1 . 11/15/2005
That was really good! I love your stories and you write some of the best love scenes I've ever read. PLEASE KEEP WRITING!
| nlgfan1 chapter 1 . 11/15/2005
That was HOT and SWEET at the same time. I hope your write more of these! I love ALL your fics and I hope your write more, soon! Thank you for this. :)