|Reviews for Forgive me|
| Thatredcar chapter 1 . 2/28/2006
“Lay off ‘Swipes. I don’t torment you for lovin’ your bro.”
“Yes but he is my brother, not some floozy femme.”
“What did you just call m’ best friend and practically m’ little sister!”
Heart-Beat couldn’t help but laugh. “You might wanna run ‘Swipe.”
hee.. that was funny.. but in the end.. so sad, so sad..
| Tirya King chapter 1 . 11/28/2005
Your writing has improved since you began, but you still desperately need a beta. I recommend writing stories just about canon chars until you get characterization down before you worry about OC's. If she wasn't really killed by that blast, then he would have known when he examined the body. It is also very unlikely that he would just suddenly read a datapad he hadn't looked at for millions of years. Either he would soon after or not at all. You need a lot more description in your story if we are to see what you are trying to show us.
Also, if you are going to lift from someone else's work, please ask their permission first. Thank you.