Reviews for The Darkness Within Her Eyes
Pianodiva88 chapter 1 . 12/13/2005
Dear Mayuko-chan,

I thought this story was good, though not as intense as "my fault". I found it a bit confusing, but overall I really liked it.

You should be a pro writer, you're so good.

Sincerely,

Pianodiva88
Rakal chapter 2 . 12/3/2005
Okay, first off, you've got a few grammar errors here and there, and some more confusion between "than" and "then", but that's okay.

Now, for praise - your descriptions were awesome! Really, I could sorta picture all of this stuff in my head, you did a great job describing everything. Secondly, the way your portrayed everyone's emotion, paticularly Sheila's insanity, and maybe even Kevin's... you're doing that absolutely perfectly. You can just really tell what's going on in their heads and how it's fitting with everything else. You've definitely got those parts under control - nice job!
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