yay i really really loved tjis story

yay i really really loved tjis story

i realy like it i'm glad here are writers like you you inspire me to become a better writer :)

This was a very cute story I'm really glad I found. In the beginning I could feel my heart lurch for every time Naruto was looked down at or misunderstood. Loved it :)

I have really enjoyed your story, I hate those storys where Naruto is made out to be an idiot because he really isn't! And the way youve portrayed Naruto is really intresting, I loved the way you described everything from the flat to the soroundings. I also really loved the way other pairings were included so it was SasuNaru centric but not just agout them. The fighting scenes, in my opinion, where actually really good even though you said you aren't good at them. The way that everyone reacted when they learned the truth about Naruto was very realistic. Overall a brilliant job, and thank you so much for writing this! Its brilliant :D

Btw... Sasuke as a neko! Soooooooooooo cute!

its up 2 u. love the story. very cute an sweet.

i love the part with the going all for SasuNaur! i was laughing my bead off when i read it.

Kura: ehehehe...so that's how they had children...:)

Berry: good story. :)

Kura: awesome, actually! very cute too! XD

Berry: (nods in agreement)

Kura: ehehehe. love the ending though. i like their children. they seem KAWAII! XD

I really loved ur story and I hope u can come up with something this good again

So cute! ;) That was worth 2 hours.

I liked it alot :3 A good story~ KyuuIta 3 SasuNaru 3 It was awesome. Good Work -

Ja ne

Kiyomi Chan

AWWWWWW SOO KAWAII~ The flashback of Itachi and Sasuke~ I said the same exact thing Naruto said at the end of the flash back without realizing it xD I was like so kawaii~ It almost had me at tears. Gonna finish up the story now x3 and then leave my final review~ I just had to say that xD

That was such a nice ending. It sounded pretty done to me. I know that you wrote this story 5-6 years ago, but I guess it would be okay if I am going to give you some constructive criticism, right?

Truthfully, from the summary and the title itself, they are already enough to attract any readers to read your story. This story until chapter 12 was so good, that I can't help but to keep reading in the car, otw to class and even in class just right before my exam starts.

Your plot was that good.

From chapter one, I already note the depth of your story, which is shallow and simple. It doesn't run so deeply but it's okay and it's nice to read something that isn't complex to understand from time to time. So, I had lots of fun reading this...that is, until chapter 13.

Chapter 13 onwards, I have to admit, they were declining, the strength of the story I mean. The moment Naruto told Sakura that he's the ANBU captain...something that he had hide so sacredly and had pretend to be a clown for his entire life, got all washed away by a phone call and his slipping tongue. That's not logic you know, for someone who was supposed to have no trust on anyone. You wrote Naruto to be someone who doesn't trust people easily, deceive people with fabricated lies, and doesn't show his true self in front of others... and suddenly, he could just tell Sakura that he's the most respected ANBU captain, just - like - that?

From that moment until he was accidentally exposed as the famous ANBU captain in front of anyone, I was pretty disappointed in reading to the point I felt like dropping the fic but as an avid reader, I have to know how you, an author of this story, ended this. (I prayed that you MUST end it good at least to make me feel better for reading your story, which you exceeded and thank you)

You have told earlier that you aren't that great in writing fighting scenes, so that part is forgiven because the fight was a little dull on the earlier chapters but at least when he was fighting with the Sound-nins, it was better albeit a tad of blandness.

Your story rushed from chapter 13 onwards until he became Rokudaime. I wished you wrote something more to make your plot to flow fluidly. As an author, you shouldn't say that you have no idea what to write because inspiration lurks at places you never thought they'll be. It's good that you ask your readers for ideas too.

Just so you know, it's bad if you kept saying that you have no idea what to write. Saying that degrades an author, not only as an author but if you said that in your real life job too, it'll degrade your work reputation. People would think that you're incapable. So, this is just for future reference. :)

Aaaaaaaanyway, back to the topic. After Naruto became a hokage, the plot rose back again. The pace was simple and I liked it... especially the ending. Good job in completing this story, thank you for writing and sharing.

Oh before I forget, you have lots of typos in the story. They left me in a bind sometimes. But other than that, everything's fine!

Chi Itachi

Ke Sasuke

I haven't completely reading this chapter but I ralized as I was falling asleep -.- it came to me that Sasuke has yet to open up that many gifts Naruto got him troughtout the years and I'm curious and too tired to find out right now, so i ask. Did Sasuke get to open those presents? :?